Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2013/Acceptance and Commitment Therapy and emotion

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Hiya, Looks like a good outline for your chapter. Not much I can add yet as feedback. Have you got any references? Happy to check them out and comment :)

I have just had a quick read. You have structured the chapter well with the flow of topics and it's very interesting. If you are going with different coloured themes for your different topics, then that works well too, however it isn't necessarily required. Maybe some images or tables would break up your structure a little bit more so that it's less symmetrical… Hope this helps a little. Sammarris (discuss • contribs) 02:13, 1 November 2013 (UTC)

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Hello :) thank you for the suggestion i will definitely put some images in and look at some table ideas thank you, your suggestions were very helpful! :D U3065856 (discuss • contribs) 08:58, 2 November 2013 (UTC)

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Hi Anna, The description you have given of the actual therapy is quite informative, I read through it and wasn't left with anything else I could suggest you add to it. In terms of making this a self help chapter I think you have greatly achieved this as well, you have given examples of how it can be applied, particularly in the area of depression. After you fix the structure of the boxes with the majority of the left hand side of the chapter, the overall presentation should look great! I can also suggest perhaps adding a few diagrams or a table to summarise some of your information, just to break up the text a bit? Also a few links to other pages for further information or better yet other book chapters would also be great! If you were still thinking of breaking your text up a bit more, here is a link to the syntax and you will find 'line breaks' near the top :)Also you may wish to change the italics of some of your headings so in the table of contents either all or none of the headings are different to the others, if that makes sense? U3054791 (discuss • contribs) 02:24, 1 November 2013 (UTC)

Oh thank you so much! Your feedback is greatly appreciated and i can see how the lay out needs to be touched up and some images and tables added! :) U3065856 (discuss • contribs) 08:58, 2 November 2013 (UTC)

Hi Anna, Your chapter is pretty good so far, can I suggest maybe a few pictures or diagrams or something to break up all the content? It's coming along nicely though well done --U3068359 (discuss • contribs) 03:09, 1 November 2013 (UTC)u3068359

Yeah i think i've putting of the images until the end as i'm having difficulty understnad how to add them! haha Thank you for your feedback i will take it on board. :) U3065856 (discuss • contribs) 08:58, 2 November 2013 (UTC)

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Hi Anna, love what you have it is very comprehensive, I have been 'bold' and edited some of the grammar errors, also i changed the 'underlying theories comprising ACT' to just theories, obviously change it back if you dont like it,i just think it sounds unnecessary, and as the chapter is meant to be for a lay audience the use of extra big words doesnt work lol. Hope this helps!! Sorry if you ahte the changes! Olivia Poscoliero (discuss • contribs) 04:35, 1 November 2013 (UTC)

Haha no problem Olivia, i liked that change :) thank you U3065856 (discuss • contribs) 08:58, 2 November 2013 (UTC)

Hi Anna, I have only glanced over your chapter as I don't think I will be much help in regards to the content side of things. One thing I would suggest is in your second heading you automatically say ACT meaning acceptance and commitment therapy. I feel as if I was a layman reader I would have a little bit of trouble with this. I think you need to be more subtle in introducing abbreviations as such. Maybe by pairing acceptance and commitment therapy (ACT) together for a little bit before assuming they will know what the ACT abbreviation means. Does this make sense? A tip that I often use which I feel will help you with your chapter overall is to read you chapter as if you have no idea of any of the content (like you have never heard of ACT before) and ask yourself if it would makes sense to you.. It just helps with smoothing out the creases. I often find this helps with putting what is in your head on paper in a way that will make sense to someone else. Congrats on have a solid chapter up and goodluck with the rest of it! --Bridgiedidge (discuss • contribs) 10:58, 1 November 2013 (UTC)

Thank you for that suggestion Bridget, i also sometimes thought the same thing whilst reading it i will edit the abbreviations towards the top of the chapter will i guess should help readers ease into it. Thank you for your advice U3065856 (discuss • contribs) 08:58, 2 November 2013 (UTC)

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Hey Anna

I've only quickly glanced over the chapter but it seems very interesting. I just have a couple of suggestions. The first is maybe include a few more images and/or diagrams to help break up the information as I think it is a lot to take in - visual aids are always useful. Second, I noticed that you tend to switch between tenses. You start off in first person then go to third person then to second person (addressing the reader directly). It isn't a big issue but it might all flow a bit better if you use just one point of view.

Very interesting. Can't wait to read when you're done! Clarev (discuss • contribs) 11:20, 2 November 2013 (UTC)

Hi Anna! Your chapter's looking good! The diagrams really liven it up and engage the audience (well, it did for me). Just a suggestion though, your paragraphs look a bit large and that can be tiring when reading. I think smaller ones would keep more interest and also break up the reading a bit.Emily.Antonio (discuss • contribs) 05:29, 3 November 2013 (UTC)

Thank you all so much for the feedback it always good to get some feedback from others that dont know the page back and front! Thank you U3065856 (discuss • contribs) 12:23, 3 November 2013 (UTC)