Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Amotivation

Headings
Your page is a bit hard to follow, I think the issue is that you have used three equals signs (which makes sub headings) instead of using 2 equal signs. When using subheadings use 3 but when you are creating titles use the following == insert text here   == Good luck with the rest of your chapter AGH BMW (discuss • contribs) 04:14, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

Australian spelling
Hi! I know it's still very early days, but while trying to figure out how I could help your page (which i'm really liking the layout of, by the way) I noticed you had used words such as utilize and desensitize, rather than the Australian counterparts with the S instead. I know it's a very pedantic thing to pick out but it's explicitly mentioned in the assessment criteria to use Australia spelling and it would suck to lose marks for something so trivial.

Joelthebaws (discuss • contribs)

Headings
Your page is a bit hard to follow, I think the issue is that you have used three equals signs (which makes sub headings) instead of using 2 equal signs. When using subheadings use 3 but when you are creating titles use the following == insert text here   ==

Comments
Hi, I love this chapter, it's going to be a fantastic read when it is finished, and well done on getting this much done :). I changed a little spelling error around. I really am looking forward to what will come under the headings 'finding motivation' and 'preventing amotivation' they sound very interesting. Perhaps even something interactive there? Well done.

--Lucy90 (discuss • contribs) 23:32, 4 October 2014 (UTC)

Comment
Hi, I just was wondering whether you should consider throwing some more in-text citations into your chapter. I notice a fair few sentences filled with 'factual information' which you've gained from somewhere, that should be referenced within the text as well as in your reference list. Nice job on your chapter & all the best. U3083503 (discuss • contribs) 12:45, 22 October 2014 (UTC)

APA style captions for images and tables
I recommend using APA style captions i.e., Figure 1, Figure 2 etc. for all images, graphs etc. and Table 1, Table 2 etc. for all tables. The caption text should not be in italics. For more detail and examples, see http://libguides.newcastle.edu.au/content.php?pid=113807&sid=1208571 -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:00, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

comment
hi, i thought it might look nicer if you made the spaces between paragraphs smaller and also not have a space between the heading and the first paragraph. also in the overview i thought it might be better if you had intrinsic motivation is: on a separate line and on the same line as the definition provided, also intrinsic motivation definition can probably be in the same para as the other definitions. --Hynes08 (discuss • contribs) 00:34, 24 October 2014 (UTC)

General layout Stuff
Hey, just had a quick read through and couldn't find anything to edit for the content so i thought i'd suggest a bit for the layout of the page. I've noticed that you're using breaks between the titles and the contents below. I'd suggest that you change the breaks so that they happen after each section rather than at the start of it. This will just show how the title is connected to the content coming after it more than the stuff before it (not completely necessary, it'll just make it flow better and look nicer). The second thing i'd suggest is that you either remove one or more of the images in the first section, and add (or spread the current ones out) some to the subsequent sections. It just looks a bit top heavy. ZombrexJim (discuss • contribs) 23:09, 26 October 2014 (UTC)

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:46, 27 November 2014 (UTC)