Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Anger and motivation

Bits and pieces
Hi, nice chapter and content. I've had a few ideas and found a few things that could help with the overall presentation of the chapter (listed below) that you might want to incorporate. I also completely APA formatted your reference list (although I wasn't sure what to do with one of the authors who had a Jnr. title, so you best check that one up yourself). Good luck! Joelthebaws (discuss • contribs) 15:18, 24 October 2014 (UTC)
 * I think it would be interesting to have in the overview or introduction a little mention that anger happens to be the most prevalent day-to-day emotion, thus giving your presentation a more X-factor because it's such a big part of human life.
 * I highly recommend you use some picture in your presentation to add to the general look of it. If you don't know how there's a moodle forum on it here: http://learnonline.canberra.edu.au/mod/forum/discuss.php?d=306102
 * Many times when you use the et al. reference system in a sentence you use a comma straight after, such as “According to Carver et al., (2009)”. Now im not 100% sure on this one but I think that it’s not supposed to have a comma after it. Best to check it up!
 * Your “definitional” paragraphs for both anger and motivation seem to be too bullet-pointy, if you know what I mean. There are just single, sentences that don't really flow together. I think you should incorporate all those definitions and symptoms of anger into one coherent paragraph to help improve the feel - or simply present them as bullet points perhaps.
 * Where you have stated that: "There are positive outcomes from anger such as determination and motivation. (Kassinove, H, 1995)" I think you should definitely go into a bit more detail in this section as it seems like a very interesting point and it leaves the reader wondering a little bit.
 * There are a lot of times you have accidentally ended the sentence and then put the reference in, such as: "Anger consists of multiple components. (Darwin, C, 1965)" - It's a very easy thing to miss but I think it would be devastating to lose marks for a simple full stop in the wrong place!
 * Another referencing thing, here: “Robinson & Price (1982) studied the…” - I think you should be using the word ‘and’ rather than the ‘&’.
 * "...the individual will either use approach or avoid behaviour depending on the environment and situation." This sentence should say avoidance instead of avoid, I think.
 * "Carver and White (1994) developed the BAS (behavioural activation system) and BIS (behavioural inhibition system) to measure incentive and threat sensitivity..." - I think it would be important to mention that they developed the SCALES to measure this, not the BIS and BAS itself, as I thought those terms referred to underlying neural stuff that regulate behaviour.
 * "Veling (2012) and colleagues" - Here I think sticking to et al. or including the entire citation would be best.
 * "Associating anger with rewarding stimuli increases reward sensitivity (Ford et al., 2010)" - You've kind of just thrown this sentence in there without a context or introduction. It’s a little awkward to read. Perhaps replace that sentence somewhere in the paragraph or reword it a little.

Comments
Hi!

Just thought I would provide you with a reference in terms of the role of anger and anxiety on motivation. http://www.selfdeterminationtheory.org/SDT/documents/2005_AssosKaplanKanat-MaymonRoth.pdf It may be useful -depending on whether you choose to talk about a particular age group. Good luck with your chapter! :) --U3054867 (discuss • contribs) 02:07, 20 October 2014 (UTC)

Hey, i came across this when looking for information for a different assignment, thought it might be an interesting read. http://www.psychologicalscience.org/index.php/news/releases/anger-makes-people-want-things-more.html Lucydiamond1008 (discuss • contribs) 02:30, 21 October 2014 (UTC)lucydiamond1008

Heading formatting
I suggest removing bold from the headings; just use the default font etc. to help keep the chapter layouts consistent with one another and Wikipedia -- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:21, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

Feedback
Hey there, as someone who is also talking anger, I found this an interesting and different view about aggressive behaviour compared to my chapter! I liked how you defined the several different types of anger, and how it can be relatable to criminal activity. Again, I am a fan of including a quiz at the end of the book chapter - I hope to do this myself. It provides an interesting way to ensure your reader is understanding your book chapter efficiently, as well as learning all about your topic! --U3069714 (discuss • contribs) 07:34, 26 October 2014 (UTC)

General feedback
U3014122 (discuss • contribs) 00:31, 3 November 2014 (UTC)
 * Segway from Motivation to anger and the relationship between the two could have been summarized in fewer paragraphs – definitions of motivation are relevant but perhaps not required to be so long especially considering it is a chapter which is latter.
 * sentence structure could be aimed more at readers less accustomed to scholar writing. Overly complex sentences which at times do not give an argument/point
 * paragraphs change in size and some do not make sense.
 * no constructive examples??

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:24, 1 December 2014 (UTC)