Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Chocolate and mood

Hedonism
Hey! I noticed you mentioned hedonism, which I am looking at for my chapter too, and I was finding it a bit difficult to find stuff until I found this: http://pq.2004.tripod.com/happiness_three_traditional_theories.pdf I thought it might help you out a bit! N.matthews3500 (discuss • contribs) 09:01, 21 October 2014 (UTC)

Thanks Nicola, I will incorporate this in - it makes me pleased I can talk a little bit more about happiness theories. U3083503 (discuss • contribs) 09:35, 21 October 2014 (UTC)

Chocolate and Mood
I found another article that might be interesting to you about chocolate and mood: http://www.sciencedirect.com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/science/article/pii/S016503270600084X# I know it's not specific to happiness, which is what you are focusing on, but you might find some interesting information! N.matthews3500 (discuss • contribs) 11:56, 22 October 2014 (UTC)

APA style captions for images and tables
I recommend using APA style captions i.e., Figure 1, Figure 2 etc. for all images, graphs etc. and Table 1, Table 2 etc. for all tables. The caption text should not be in italics. For more detail and examples, see http://libguides.newcastle.edu.au/content.php?pid=113807&sid=1208571 -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:28, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

Referencing
The chapter looks great! I did notice you have referenced Kringelback & Berridge, 2009 for hedonism theory, this however is not in your reference list.

Good luck

I also noticed that you spelt it as 'Kringelbach' the first two times and then as 'Kringelback' the other three times. N.matthews3500 (discuss • contribs) 06:46, 25 October 2014 (UTC)

Final Draft Edit
Overall, this is a really good chapter, well done! Here are just a few suggestions though:


 * Your concept checks are great, however, I don't think it's necessary to have one for the chocolate section, as all of it is pretty straight forward. I think this will also help in getting you back into the word count.


 * Essentially, the theory suggests that serotonin is directly related with mood, and thus the result in depressive disorders when serotonin levels become too low (Deacon & Baird, 2009). - You may want to just edit this sentence.


 * Further evidence that suggests that carbohydrates are influential in the elevation of serotonin levels in the body is that which exists in order to develop the serotonergic hypothesis, a popular theory amongst researchers today regarding the self-medication using chocolate (Parker et al., 2006). - This one too. :)


 * In your last concept check, you say "the reader", but since the reader is currently reading it, you should probably change it to "you".

Also, I made some minor grammatical edits (mainly adding commas) and deleted an instances where you repeated yourself, but I didn't make any major changes. Let me know if you need any more editing/clarification!

By the way, I love the fact that you drew your own pictures to explain the tricky biological bits - it made it so much easier to understand! Great job! :) N.matthews3500 (discuss • contribs) 14:00, 26 October 2014 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:04, 19 November 2014 (UTC)

RenaeLN (discuss • contribs) 07:02, 21 November 2014 (UTC)