Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Fear as a motivator

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Hey! This is really interesting :) just one thing I noticed with your referencing, instead of "(Davis (1992))" (for example), just have "(David, 1992)" for the correct APA formatting :) if you change that throughout it'll help heaps with your referencing mark!! Good luck with the rest! --121.223.187.104 (discuss) 10:27, 26 October 2014 (UTC) --121.223.187.104 (discuss) 10:28, 26 October 2014 (UTC)

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Hi there, have had a read through your chapter, is all sounding good, hope you don't mind I have corrected a few grammatical and spelling errors in the first four sections, also corrected a few intext citations that were still formatted incorrectly, hope this was ok? Goodluck Josephineanne (discuss • contribs)

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Hi Hayden

Your page is looking good! I think a bit of colour on those grey boxes might lighten the look of it though. Also, you could head those with 'Case study' (you can probably check out some of the other pages for easy ways to format that).

I'd also suggest putting in some links on your words, eg fear, emotion, motivation.

You've done a good job keeping your definition of fear brief, but I wonder if you should define motivation/motivator as well.

I think you could expand on how operant conditioning works, maybe briefly making the link between rewards/strengthening and punishment/weakening.

Are there any studies to say you're born with fears? You could touch on genetics here.

Also, you may want to briefly expand on classical conditioning - just something like 'where one stimulus becomes associated with another and starts to elicit a similar response'.

There appears to be a few sentences that might need citing, eg A study into a common phobia, trypophobia (fear of holes), conducted spectral analysis on images that were more likely to trigger peoples phobias. Who did this study???

Are anxiety and fear the same? kind of comes out of nowhere, and doesn't relate to the paragraphs on either side (which both link fear with motivation). This may be better placed up the top under your paragraph defining fear.

Generally you've got lots of great info. I think, depending on your word count, you could expand some of the paragraphs with more studies or examples. Other than that, you've done well!

ChelsiCFD (discuss • contribs) 12:32, 26 October 2014 (UTC)

ShaunaB (discuss • contribs) 09:27, 18 November 2014 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:42, 27 November 2014 (UTC)