Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Terrorism motivation

Use of colour
I recommend minimising use of coloured backgrounds e.g., due to accessibility issues for people with visual disabilites. Note that Wikipedia articles have a white background as standard. Coloured is only used e.g., in pictures or graphs, to help convey data/concepts. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:15, 21 October 2014 (UTC)

Punctuation and some new information
Hey, i fixed up a few punctuation and spelling errors throughout your chapter I hope you don't mind, I find your information really interesting especially with everything happening at the moment, however in your theory sections about the different floor levels, I noticed you have a reference up the top but then have neglected to reference throughout the rest of that section, I think you may need to add more intext citations to ensure you don't get picked up for plagiarism. Perhaps you could also include a case study (if there are any out there) about someone who has joined a terrorist organisation and gotten out, or perhaps an interview with one that discusses why they are so dedicated to that particular organisation. http://www.apa.org/monitor/2009/11/terrorism.aspx

This article has some really good information that you could include such as information on characteristics of people more likely to join terrorist groups, and how cultural influences also impact on that. Hope all that helps. --U3080853 (discuss • contribs) 04:44, 22 October 2014 (UTC)

Punctuation, grammar and rewording
Hey I just went through your section labelled 'Motivations behind joining terrorist organisations and committing violent terrorist acts' and corrected spelling and grammatical errors throughout, I hope that this helps. I found one sentence under the heading 'Third Floor' that I thought could be reworded. So this is what you have written at the moment: 'The people who occupy the third floor connect with terrorist organisations and being the process of morally engaging with the terrorist organisation their ideals, values and ,morals'. I thought this could possibly be reworded to: People who occupy the third flood connect with terrorist organisations and are in the process of engaging with the terrorist organisation's ideals, values and morals. I hope that that makes sense and could possibly help. It would be a good idea to include a reference after this sentence and reference more throughout your chapter to avoid plagiarism. Overall well done and an interesting topic! --U3081027 (discuss • contribs) 05:04, 22 October 2014 (UTC)

Comments
Hey I have just completed some more editing on your book chapter, I hope this is okay. I just did some minor changes to spelling and punctuation from the start of the 'Borum: Stages of development of extremist ideas and justification of violence section to the end of the 'Self radicalisation' section. I hope this has helped. --U3081027 (discuss • contribs) 02:28, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

Hey your chapter is coming along nicely! I just did some minor edits as some words were in American spelling and some missing capital letters. Well done so far, looks good! --U3081027 (discuss • contribs) 23:44, 24 October 2014 (UTC)

Heading formatting
I recommend using the default heading formatting i.e., remove bold etc. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:49, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

APA style captions for images and tables
I recommend using APA style captions i.e., Figure 1, Figure 2 etc. for all images, graphs etc. and Table 1, Table 2 etc. for all tables. The caption text should not be in italics. For more detail and examples, see http://libguides.newcastle.edu.au/content.php?pid=113807&sid=1208571 -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:49, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:30, 27 November 2014 (UTC)