Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Testosterone and emotion

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Hey buddy, I was just looking at some of the previous book chapter topics relating to aggression and I came across this https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2013/Testosterone_and_emotion it is a book chapter that was done last year on testosterone and emotion, thought it might be helpful. Just be sure to make your content different to this one as you don't want two chapters on the same topic :) Good luck! U3081383 (discuss • contribs) 01:27, 22 October 2014 (UTC)\

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I have changed a few lines and your headings. Maybe try put in a few more visuals. Very good cover of testosterone and aggression and depression and mood.

U3081461 (discuss • contribs) 02:34, 26 October 2014 (UTC)

I hope you don't mind I edited your chapter. I changed a few things mostly just wording of some sentences to reduce word count as I noticed you were a fair bit over the word limit. I've brought you down to 4404 words. I adjusted some (not many as there weren't many) grammar and spelling errors. I would recommend expanding on your conclusion and maybe add in some wiki links (I did one for you). Other than that it was good, well written, very informative and covered the topic in really good detail. You used your references well and I liked your take home messages. Good luck :D #dreamteam U3081383 (discuss • contribs) 03:29, 26 October 2014 (UTC)

Hi

I've just changed your first line - you should be under the word limit now and I think it reads a little better.

You'll need to fix up your headings (only caps for first words etc).

I'd suggest changing your Learning objectives to focus questions (you could ditch the title and just roll with the questions, ie 'what is testosterone".

I really like how you've set out The challenge hypothesis. The only thing I'd maybe add is a small conclusion at the end.

You could add some extra pictures - maybe of anger or depression.

You may want to put some hyperlinks in as well (think this is in the marking criteria).

Other than that, your layout is great. You've used colour really well to seperate your topics.

Great job!

Chelsi CFD (discuss • contribs) 13:08, 26 October 2014 (UTC)

HI

Sorry, I just thought of one more thing I meant to say - if you're not going to put an external link in you should probably delete the heading.

Chelsi CFD (discuss • contribs) 14:59, 26 October 2014 (UTC)

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