Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Illegitimate children and emotion

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Hi there,

Your topic seems very interesting. I have actually found two resources that may help you along with the assignment.


 * Illegitimate children and adoption


 * Adopted children and maternal emotions

Good luck! --U3096823 (discuss • contribs) 22:27, 14 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi mate, your topic and the examples you have used are quite unique. The use of a well-known show like game of thrones is in my opinion a double edged sword. One, because it allows for an easy and relatable assessment of the point you are trying to make (especially if the reader has seen the show), but on the other hand, it is a little colloquial for an academic paper even for the lay person. Quoting a line from a TV show for example isn't exactly academic language. Just my personal view on it that's all. Obviously there is a bit of filling in to do. The theories you have chosen are good one's (once you write about them) for your topic, as they fit nicely. Perhaps under the title 'psychological effects' you could also put 'behavioural and psychological effects', because delinquency for example weighs heavily on the behavioural side of things. Maybe even split the structure a little more in order to accommodate this. Apart from that, it looks like a solid topic and structure. --David M&E7124 (discuss • contribs) 1503, 18 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi, I was wondering if you found anything to do with illegitimate siblings? If they are two illegitimate siblings do they cope better emotionally? Do they have each other for support? This might be an interesting small point to add somewhere along the line. Perhaps even though their parents are not married they may not feel the same way and behave the same way as an only child, because their parents have stayed together through two children. I don't actually know the correct answer, just a thought I had. But so far I think this chapter is a really interesting and unique topic. U3100230 (discuss • contribs) 00:58, 20 October 2015 (UTC)

Hey, I like the examples from modern TV shows that will draw in your audience at the start of the chapter. The fun facts at the end about famous illegitimate children is also really interesting. If you want to engage the readers a bit more, you could maybe put a quiz in and ask them who they think are illegitimate children before giving the answers. Your layout looks really good so far, i just got a little confused in the area on theories, maybe you could separate the boxes so it is a bit clearer.

Comments/Feedback
Hey, i love you case study at the start based on a game of thrones character - really creative involving such a story. Do you need to reference "Other terms that are often used to describe an illegitimate child are love child, bastard, or non-marital child." ? Maybe include a bit more information in the 'behavioural and psychological effect', describe more studies or research that have found these results? I like how you brought the case of Jon Snow back in later in the chapter, linking it back. Also the 'fun facts' at the end is great :) U3097090 (discuss • contribs) 08:49, 23 October 2015 (UTC)

Resources
Hi there, you have some really good information, it flows well, one thing I would add (and obviously your not finished and will probably add them anyways) is some graphs or tables! I found some good resources you could use:

This website brings in race- mainly looking into America though, could at least give you an idea of how to go about putting statistics and graphs on to your page The Black illegitimacy argument This website could help with your facts area- some very interesting statistics that were only published last year 27 Enticing Illegitimate Children Statistics This does not have graphs or anything on it, it just draws on different aspects of illegitimacy- I found it really interesting, definitely worth having a look Out-of-Wedlock Childbearing and Paternal Absence: Trends and Social Effects

Good luck, your doing great! --U3098499 (discuss • contribs) 13:32, 21 October 2015 (UTC)

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