Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Mastery and flow

Structure
Nice book chapter, flow is something that I think we should all experience more in our short lives. Thanks for describing it :) I think your chapter has a clear layout. I also like the easy study, and also the "take home message" section as I think that fits nicely with the theme of the book chapter. I think some more colour would really brighten it up. I also think several of your paragraphs are quite long (I also know you must still be in the editing stage). Under Written Expression on the assessment page https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Motivation_and_emotion/Assessment/Chapter James describes how paragraphs with 1 major point explained in 3-5 sentences is satisfactory. You have great content and I think if you could style it in closer adherence to the assessment criteria it would be a solid chapter. Good luck! :) Ccgmjb (discuss • contribs) 00:39, 12 October 2015 (UTC)

Layout
Hi! You're book chapter looks like it's going great,the detail on flow is really thorough! However in some place you might like to break up some of the chunks of text a bit to make it easier for the reader to understand. You could do this by: Awesome job though! I feel like I gained alot from reading your chapter U3096454! (discuss • contribs) 04:30, 18 October 2015 (UTC)
 * Numbered bullet points (perhaps where you talk about the 9 major components of flow)
 * Some coloured boxes for key concepts (See the Moodle forum for tips on how to put these in)
 * Subheadings (particularly when you are talking about the different theories or maybe even add a table so it's easier for the viewer to compare them)

Feedback
Hi, your book chapter looks great so far. Good layout and great how you started off with a case study however, it might be clearer to perhaps do a general overview of Flow and Mastery and then in a separate section do a case study on its own? I just feel the case study is the whole overview which in that case we dont really get an overview. Love the table you put in but I agree with the above, perhaps add more colour. An easy way to do this is to make that table a nice colour instead of gray.

Good luck :) u3079526

Great topic and very well written. Did you know that ‘flow’ has been featured been the news recently. Here is an article by Mihaly Csikszentmihalyi himself on “Mental As: 'Flow' vital for happy, fulfilled life” posted on the ABC news website. http://www.abc.net.au/news/2015-10-06/mental-as-happiness-is-flow/6819406 The article also ends with a 10-point plan for ‘flow’ which you may find interesting. I like the story you use to introduce the chapter. In your section on Goals you write about instrinsic and extrinsic motivation as well as social comparison and explain them very well. If you wanted some additional references, here are some that I have come across by Deci and Ryan. There are a few minor edits you may want to consider. I didn’t want to mess with your chapter so I’ve made a couple of suggestions in this message: Dean is 35 years old and was raised near a river by loving parents who taught him to work hard, ‘fun’ was largely considered wasted time. Suggested change: Dean is 35 years old and was raised near a river by loving parents who taught him to work hard. ‘Fun’ was largely considered wasted time. For example, Dean’s work culture overwhelms some resulting in anxiety driving them out of the zone. Suggested change: For example, Dean’s work culture overwhelms some resulting in anxiety driving them out of the zone. Clear objectives can give actions direction, sequence and structure, however since Csikszentmihalyi and LeFevre’s (1989) earlier work, it’s become apparent that not all objectives are optimal depending on the person’s cognitions, traits and proximity to reaching their objectives (Ranellucci, Hall, & Goetz, 2015). Suggested change: Clear objectives can give actions direction, sequence and structure. However, since Csikszentmihalyi and LeFevre’s (1989) earlier work, it’s become apparent that not all objectives are optimal depending on the person’s cognitions, traits and proximity to reaching their objectives (Ranellucci, Hall, & Goetz, 2015). So you are more likely to experience flow by arranging a task so that all the flow preconditions are present rather than just focusing on some. Suggested change: You are therefore more likely to experience flow by arranging a task so that all the flow preconditions are present rather than just focusing on some.U3092375 (discuss • contribs) 04:05, 21 October 2015 (UTC)
 * Ryan, R. M., & Deci, E. L. (2000). Self-determination theory and the facilitation of intrinsic motivation, social development, and well-being. American Psychologist, 55(1), 68-78. doi:10.1037/0003-066X.55.1.68
 * Ryan, R. M., & Deci, E. L. (2001). ON HAPPINESS AND HUMAN POTENTIALS: A Review of Research on Hedonic and Eudaimonic Well-Being. Annual Review Of Psychology, 52(1), 141-166
 * Deci, E. L. and Ryan, R. M. (1985). The general causality orientations scale: Self-determination in personality. Journal of Research in Personality, 19(2), 109-134. doi: 10.1016/0092-6566(85)90023-6 Retrieved from http://www.researchgate.net/profile/Richard_Ryan2/publication/222439154_The_general_causality_orientations_scale_Self-determination_in_personality/links/02bfe513dd59438952000000.pdf
 * Deci, E. L., & Ryan, R. M. (2000). The 'What' and 'Why' of Goal Pursuits: Human Needs and the Self-Determination of Behavior. Psychological Inquiry, 11(4), 227
 * Paragraph structure: Second paragraph under ‘Preconditions of flow’ is very good because of how you provide examples all the way through. It is also very long (over 500 words).  It might be easier for some people to take in the key points if you break it up a little.  The same may apply to at least one of the paragraphs under your heading ‘Goals’
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Hello, this chapter as grown immensely since I last checked. I like the layout and information. I suggest maybe putting the first case study/example into a coloured box, as it is two paragraphs and would make a prettier display. I think there is a couple of wikilinks that could also have been provided such as: Achievement goal theory; Self-determination theory; Flow; Performance Goals; Mastery Goals etc. This would make it more interactive. I love the quiz, quite an advanced one as well. Great job! Ccgmjb (discuss • contribs) 05:30, 21 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi! Cool chapter, interesting topic. I like how you've opened it using a case study, one suggestion is although it's quite long, to put it into a coloured table as it draws more attention to it. Having it apart of the text like any other subheading doesn't provide much of an introduction. Don't think it's a huge issue, but the info you have under each image is in italics, when the figure number only needs to be in italics. In your 'see also' section as well, make sure you add a link to each chapter you have there, that way people can go directly to it. Other than that, I like the variety of images you've used and the concepts you've addressed, good work :) --Bt1718 (discuss • contribs) 04:31, 21 October 2015 (UTC)

Recording name
Currently the recording is named "Recording #2". I suggest giving it a more meaningful name (e.g., the same or similar to the book chapter name). -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:35, 21 October 2015 (UTC)

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