Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Selective mutism and emotional well-being

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Hi. You book chapter topic sounds really interesting. I would think about adding a section on children and mutism as i feel there is a genetic/hereditary component to it. I look forward to reading more about your chapter soon! Ive attached a good reference you may want to use! Black, B., & Uhde, T. W. (1995). Psychiatric characteristics of children with selective mutism: a pilot study. Journal of the American Academy of Child & Adolescent Psychiatry, 34(7), 847-856.

Goodluck! --U3034876 (discuss • contribs) 00:54, 20 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi thereǃ Interesting topicǃ Few suggestions that could make the paper betterː Your headings are a bit wordy at the moment; I recommend theseː 1. Instead of saying "What it is not (Misconceptions)" just say "Misconceptions" or "Myths" or "Common Myths"--sounds catchierǃ 2. For subheading 2.4 maybe its better to say "Comparing selective & traumatic mutism" 3. I found this handout sort of article which provides some great charts near the end; you could maybe add this as an external link or use the charts as an image/s when you discuss the SCAT http://www.selectivemutismcenter.org/media_library/whatissm.pdf. 4. I think it's best to move the diagnostic criteria to the paragraph where you first talk of Selective Mutism as a condition; that will help the reader know earlier in the chapter what the disorder entails. 5. You may also like to talk about how parents can notice the signs and symptoms earlier and the strategies they can use to help their child. I really hope that helpsǃ--U3059210 (discuss • contribs) 23:28, 23 October 2015 (UTC)

Hello. Your structure looks like it all makes sense. I would get your content in asap so people can read and edit wording and you end up getting a better idea of page layout. I started off with way to many headings and ended up refining some as I went, but it depends on how relevant and important the sections are to getting your point across. I will log back in tomorrow afternoon and help a little with editing advice. All the best writing, interesting topic choice. David James Stevenson (discuss • contribs) 04:38, 24 October 2015 (UTC)

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Hi Kaisha, good job so far the set out flows really well. Its obviously not finished yet so you were probably going to add these things anyway but just in case:
 * Maybe add a reference in your first paragraph of the overview.
 * I think if we link to other websites as you have under the “selective mutism” section. It has to go under a “See also” section which goes last, even after the references.
 * Might have to add a references in the “shyness” section.
 * Under the “emotional well being section” you wrote “well-being refers to a positive mental health”. Maybe change to “refers to positive mental health” so delete the “a”.
 * All the links in the “behavioural therapy” section could go in your “see also” section at the end.

Good job 

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