Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Zeigarnik effect

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Hi! I love your book chapter topic - how interesting!! I'd never heard of the Zeigarnik effect before, and mainly read your page to see what it was all about. I now know what the effect is and its' real world applications, which shows that your book chapter is informative and definitely on the right track. You could consider adding a section on how to counteract the Zeigarnik effect (if there are any), or is this effect simply a by-product of our memory systems? Overall good job, i look forward to the rest of your chapter :) --U3081677 (discuss • contribs) 00:24, 7 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi! Cool topic, never heard of it until now! The layout is so simple to follow along with as well. Good use of tables and pictures. I just made one change where two words were put together without a space! Other than that, just be careful of your word limit, I noticed it's well over the 4,400 (+10%) mark and in the book chapter guidelines it says any chapters beyond this won't be considered for marking, so as hard as it is to cut back, maybe try cutting a bit out of it! It seems silly, but to reduce mine I changed a lot of "it is" to "it's" just to get rid of 1 extra word and it took out quite a large chunk of words. Good luck :) --Bt1718 (discuss • contribs) 00:26, 19 October 2015 (UTC)

Fantastic chapter! As I read over it the examples and sections flowed logically and succinctly, from the beginning to the end I thought "this chapter makes full sense". A great piece of work :) Also the applied suggestions at the end are stated from research, which I think strengthens their cause. :) Ccgmjb (discuss • contribs) 23:57, 18 October 2015 (UTC)

Hey! Good job on youre book chapter but i wanted to point out that when you reference and talk about the author of a source you put their name and then the year after the name of the author. Youre not suppose to cite the entire name of the author in the middle of a sentence. For example, you wrote "...been tested more recently by (Seifert & Patalano, 1991), and..." It should be "...been tested more recently by Seifert and Patalano (1991), and..." Thanks and goodluck Uu3148421 (discuss • contribs) 04:36, 19 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi there :) top effort on your chapter, it's informative and well thought out! One tip I would suggest is providing a bit more colour to add some structure to your chapter, in particular the overview heading is a great way to engage the audience's attention however I think it would work better if you centered it and made it more bold. Also consider including a diagram or image of some sort that can visually deomonstrate some of the theories and other approaches which try to explain your subject area - this will make it easier and more clearer for the readers :) Other than that keep up the good work! User:U3097062 20 Oct 2015

Great chapter. I hadn't actually heard of the Zeigarnik effect. The only thing is to just recheck your word count, it is a fair bit over and I would hate you to lose any marks for such a great chapter. You could link a section to another page if you didn't want to lose any info. Happy assignmenting. David James Stevenson (discuss • contribs) 14:36, 23 October 2015 (UTC)

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Sunday, 4 Oct 2015
Suggested sharing links between two book chapters. Mine is on the Zeigarnik effect which is often used in advertising to create strong memories for brand or product. - U943390 Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Brand name product purchase motivation

Again - suggested a link and volunteered to bring a paragraph about Zeigarnik effect to this chapter alsoTalk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Consumer motivation

Tuesday, 6 Oct 2015
Reviewed and made several suggestions for the following chapter in the discuss tab. - Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Internet addiction motivation

Sunday, 11 October 2015
Tried to help out by making expression, grammar and copy edits, including a suggestion for where a reference was needed, on the first paragraph in this book chapter. Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2015/Domestic_violence_and_emotion_regulation_in_children

Tuesday, 13 October 2015
Reviewed the Group sports motivation book chapter and made the following comments in moodle []

"Hi Micah, I had a look at your chapter smile. Cool topic.   i thought maybe include something about team motivation or how to motivate teams of people, to really flesh out any possible distinction between general sport motivations and team sport motivations?   I am not seeing a strong difference between the two types of sport. Maybe a definition of group sport?  Does it include playing golf with friends for example?  another idea would be  to look at group sport participation at different ages?  Why do people participate in group sports in old age for example?

i think your intro fictional example is interesting but I am not sure it convinces me about the unique elements of group sport motivation --focusing on a single star player seems a bit counter-intuitive. I wonder if there are any real examples of sports people moving from individual sport to group sports?".

Sunday, 18 October 2015
Made the following response to a question about layout and colour usage [| moodle entry]

Hi David, I do find the page to be kind of arbitrarily broken into different coloured boxes. I think there should be some resting white space otherwise it is hard to know what is most important and how to follow the connections. Maybe reduce the number of boxes?

Monday, 19 October 2015
Made the following contribution to [| David's page] Hi David, I really like the improvements you have made by removing the coloured boxes. So much more white space to rest while reading makes a big difference, although I think you could put one or two boxes in :) I hope you don't mind but I updated a couple of sentences in your Extrinsic and Intrinsic motivation section to make it slightly clearer, added an introductory sentence to referenced Self determination theory research by Deci and Ryan (plus I added that reference into your reference list). Hope it helps U943390 (discuss • contribs) 08:35, 19 October 2015 (UTC)

Tuesday, 20 October 2015
a. Made an moodle post offering to assist as research assistant for others.

b. Another moodle post after reviewing [] letting the author know that we are expected to use APA style referencing, not wiki style links for references. " Maddy, I am pretty sure you need to use APA style referencing in your book chapter.  That means all those reference links you have included need to be updated unfortunately."

Wednesday, 21 October 2015
1. Added the following to [| Illegitimate children and emotion] 02:44, 21 October 2015 (diff | hist). . (+561)‎ . . Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Illegitimate children and emotion ‎ (→‎History: added in some ideas about historical status of illegitimate children. I am sorry I haven't got the specific references for this info, although the British consulate has details about citizenship law) (current) (Tag: VisualEditor)

"Illegitimate children have historically had less social status than legitimate children, with no right of inheritance of property, name or title. There may be an emotional impact from being considered of lower social status?

Illegitimacy may also impact on entitlement to claim citizenship of some countries, for example, until recently illegitimacy meant it was not possible to claim British citizenship by descent. Basically if your mother and British father were not married at the time of your birth you could not claim British citizenship."

2. Shared a suggestion and possible link recommendation between Zeigarnik effect and Luxury goods motivation - at http://learnonline.canberra.edu.au/mod/forum/discuss.php?d=369814

3. Made edits and submitted content to the dance motivation chapter and the following suggestion in Moodle - "Hi Chloe,  I looked at your chapter and I am inspired by the beautiful dance photos.   I hope you don't mind but I added a box with a quote from Jane Austen's Pride and Prejudice about dancing. Take it out if it isn't what you want. I did put a citation from Google scholar into your reference list also but I don't have the right page reference for a quote, if you have your own copy then I would check there (or perhaps just a hyperlink would be enough?) I do think there is something to be explored in relation to that quote -- dancing is a refined social construct vs dancing happens in all cultures and societies.

I wonder also if you should think about looking at some of the other articles about Exercise or Sports motivation? Some of those might help you find relevant theories and think about the different reasons people might dance.

maybe for Health and Fitness reasons, Self-expression, Mastery, Freedom?

Also there is a social element to dance - maybe that is a motivator?"

I hope that helps! Tara

Thursday, 22 October 2015
Made referencing edits and left some advice about a reference in the discuss tab 11:55, 22 October 2015 (diff | hist). . (+6)‎ . . Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Activism motivation ‎ (→‎References:  updated formatting and corrected the volume/issue details for one reference) (current) - Hi, just made some basic edits in your reference list, the lines weren't properly separated. I notice there is something wrong with your Berenguer reference, the article seems to have been updated in 2010 but your reference is 2008. U943390 (discuss • contribs) 12:01, 22 October 2015 (UTC)

Asked question on Moodle about missing links to past year Multimedia presentations

Saturday, 24 October 2015
editted headings format, style and layout on this chapter. also posted the following on moodle "Hi Anne, something funky is going on with your headings, so I had a go at organising them. Not sure if I hit the mark.  But i took the capitalisation off as it isn't standard.  And rejigged a couple.  You might hate it so just to let you know I fiddled.

I will try to get back in and read the content too!

Tara"

Sunday, 25 October 2015
Made minor amendment and left this comment in this chapter Also left this comment in the discuss tab.

"Hi, something funky is happening with your quiz. It doesn't really give a proper score so I can understand what my answers mean? Also there was a missing 'what' in one question (well I think that is what was missing!?) I fixed it. Hope that helps. U943390 (discuss • contribs) 02:22, 25 October 2015 (UTC)"

Monday, 26 October 2015
8:27am

Did some proof-reading and error correct in this chaper on high risk business motivation

Hi just letting you know I fixed a bunch of spelling and grammatical errors and some really random in text referencing. Not sure I got everything, but you should check all your references to McClelland which you spelled differently in various places. Also, your links to other pages should be the first reference to the word in the paragraph, not in the title as you have done. I am sorry I don't have time to fix that for you. U943390 (discuss • contribs) 21:24, 25 October 2015 (UTC)

Friday, 6 November 2015
Did a range of edits/reworking and basic proofing on Binge Drinking motivation chapter and sought permission to do a more vigorous edit.

Posted the following in Moodle

Hi Georgia,

I am happy to review your chapter. I have had a quick read over it and at the moment I think it needs a careful proof read/edit. There are a number of simple errors (missing capitals, commas, referencing errors etc). I am tired so I think they are distracting me and I can't seem to focus on the content.

I am happy to try and do a proof edit if you like?

Also - I don't mean to be too critical, but I think you need to rework your overview, it could be much stronger and focus on really capturing the 'problem' of binge drinking and why it is important to understand the underlying motivations and what can be done to discourage binge drinking. I think that would really help your chapter! Hi Georgia,
 * ---Second moodle comment****

I have gone through and done a range of simple edits and reworked some awkward passages. I hope you don't mind. Of course you can always undo them. I really don't think you should capitalise your theory names, it doesn't look right. I have modified some but you might need to fix some of the in-box references.

There is one section where you stopped a sentence halfway through (I have written a BOLD SECTION TO DRAW your attention to that paragraph).

Once again, I think you should go through your chapter again with a fine tooth comb and really think about how each sentence and paragraph is holding together. Some of your argument isn't quite holding together properly/is repetitive rather than convincing -- or it could be that i just don't understand it!!!?

All the best,

Tara

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