Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Anorexia nervosa and extrinsic motivation

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Hi! I would just like to say that this chapter is very informative. As someone who has shown signs of eating disorders before, I truly agree that body image can be considered a great extrinsic motivator. This article might be a great addition to reference in regards to that topic: Utami, R. N. (2019). The Relationship Between Celebrity Worship and Body Image Adolescent Who Idolize K-Pop. JOMSIGN: Journal of Multicultural Studies in Guidance and Counseling, 3(2), 137–150. https://doi.org/10.17509/jomsign.v3i2.20963 U3199859 (discuss • contribs) 12:09, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

Hey, this chapter is very well put together! I do feel as though it may be important to mention the subject of trauma and the lack of self-worth because of this, thus, effect this may have on an individual suffering from this devastating mental illness. I must credit you. This illness is extremely complex and difficult to explain as there as so many factors. Each individual suffering has their own reasons. -U3165502

Hi! Great chapter - very informative and written well. In the 'external links' at the bottom, it says 'Life Without Anorexia 1 [1]' I think the 1, in front of [1] can be deleted. Also, if you haven't finished the chapter just be careful to not go over the word limit. Awesome work!. --U3062955 (discuss • contribs) 23:53, 18 October 2016 (UTC)

Wow, this chapter is really well done. I honestly can't fault it! Good work! (God I hope this worked! haha)Chot24 (discuss • contribs) 02:12, 17 October 2016 (UTC)

Hi there, Just had a read through your chapter. It looks fantastic! Very solid effort. I did notice a couple things that you may want to think about. I'd have a think about if the diagnosis sentence is needed or if you can incorporate it in the above paragraph. Possible Causes - Psychology section - I believe your first sentence statement may need a reference to support your claim that dysfunctional thoughts have been identified. I think you will also need a reference for the Fijian Women study - Double check if it is okay to cite the study in the following sentence. Bee Taylor (discuss • contribs) 02:06, 16 October 2016 (UTC)

Everything here looks great, cant wait to read more on this topic. --U3100481 (discuss • contribs) 05:24, 31 August 2016 (UTC)

Hey, Content is looking great! If you do need a few extra words, there is a couple of sentences that are a little wordy, which may be beneficial to rephrase if you get closer to the word limit later in the semester. Well done :) HomerIncognito (discuss • contribs) 06:21, 13 September 2016 (UTC)

I found it difficult to find articles under search terms "anorexia motivation" so I changed it to 'anorexia aetiology". You might have more luck. I got to article 18 of my second search for peer reviewed journal articles here. (was on main page)

Wow! your chapter looks incredible so far! I am doing mine on death anxiety and through my research I found an article which may be helpful for you. It is titled: Death and annihilation anxieties in anorexia nervosa, bulimia, and self-mutilation. It can be accessed via the university library website using EBSCOhost. http://web.b.ebscohost.com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/ehost/detail/detail?vid=5&sid=482b929e-73c9-42b0-b130-e4262aa43595%40sessionmgr1&bdata=#AN=2007-05779-006&db=pdh if you see page 296 there is a discussion on unresolved grief which may be an interesting concept for you to include in your chapter. Specifically see the bottom paragraph about self-guilt. All the best ! --LeoDean1993 (discuss • contribs) 10:01, 2 October 2016 (UTC)

Hi, your chapter is coming together really well. I particularly like the approachable language you have used throughout. It is very easy to read and engaging. Something to consider as you get close to your count (looks like you might be getting close based on my own chapter), is to make sure that you have a good balance between background on anorexia, coverage of motivation theory and how this applies to development of anorexia and research evidence. I know that you still have some of this to complete but you may have to consider focusing more on causes and less on treatment and future directions if you are at the word count. Especially considering that theory is worth 30% of the marks. Something to consider before you devote time to drafting some of the later sections. Good luck with your editing. --BecNorton (discuss • contribs) 04:27, 8 October 2016 (UTC)

Hi, Overall, compliments on a great looking chapter so far!! I know you haven't finished yet, but I would like to see more information on co-morbidity and the "pro-anorexia" movement which I feel is definitely a significant factor among individuals. You mention "make one feel safe", possibly related to control over at least one aspect of their life? Good luck for the last week and look forward to reading the end result. --U3090066 (discuss • contribs) 20:09, 8 October 2016 (UTC)

Your chapter is very interesting and well structured. Some time back I did a report on eating disorders. I came across a 60 minute story that you may find interesting. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dbPvXjOQrq8 http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tanBB0vo38U --U109993 (discuss • contribs) 02:24, 16 October 2016 (UTC)

I love that you put the case study at the beginning of the chapter! It makes it so much more engaging! However, I think you could change this sentence "It is a complex disorder with multiple facets; it has been the focus of extensive psychological research attempting to determine contributing factors, and to establish effective treatments." to "As a complex disorder with multiple facets, it has been..." I think you could put a few more connected pieces into your "See Also" section though! --Cora.boyle (discuss • contribs) 04:20, 20 October 2016 (UTC)

Hi there! Reading through your book chapter was so interesting and engaging,m I think overall you have done a wonderful job I really can't fault anything. The only thing i can think of is that be careful that you do not go over the word limit. Seems as though you have quite a lot of words already--Lizzy94 (discuss • contribs) 04:44, 22 October 2016 (UTC)U3083568 (discuss • contribs) 15:44, 22 October 2016 (UTC)

Feedback
Hi, great chapter! Your images work really well with your chapter and even though there's a lot of context it is well divided and helped with tables and images. --JazNF (discuss • contribs) 05:56, 19 October 2016 (UTC)

Structure
Avoid sections with a single sub-section - either merge this content into the higher level section or add at least a second sub-section. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:31, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Try adding links to key words to give a more developed finish to your chapter, looks great though!--JEMwarren (discuss • contribs) 10:44, 23 October 2016 (UTC)

Fantastic chapter there! Very insightful and visually appealing, your use of pictures is great and your content is rich. This was a pleasure to read. Well done! --U3100166 (discuss • contribs) 23:26, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

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The chapter offers a clear and comprehensive review of the subject, starting with an engaging case study that emphasises the seriousness of anorexia and how it affects people's lives. The information is presented in a logical order, starting with an introduction to motivational theories and continuing on to discussions of self-determination theory, degrees of extrinsic motivation, and particular extrinsic motivators associated with anorexia.