Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Bullying and social needs

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Hello! Really enjoyed reading your chapter - good work. Made some spelling/grammatical changes throughout and also fixed up an in-text reference. U3081523 (discuss • contribs) 06:59, 20 October 2016 (UTC)

Hey there,

What a great topic, so helpful and practical. I loved the applicable case study and definitions at the start. Are you covering Cyber bullying at all? could be worth a section? http://onlinelibrary.wiley.com/doi/10.1111/j.1746-1561.2008.00335.x/full. I've included a helpful article : )--U3120626 (discuss • contribs) 00:28, 19 October 2016 (UTC)

Hi great work so far. The bold points that you have put underneath the case study example, I thought it might be good to have them listed at the end over your overview section as "The key questions that will be address in this chapter are": then list them as dot points. Also, perhaps you could put a section on internet bullying i.e trolls on Facebook given that it seems to be a common experience by many at the moment. --U3111001 (discuss • contribs) 00:22, 19 October 2016 (UTC)

Hi, great chapter. I was thinking maybe you would like to put a disclaimer at the start of the chapter saying "If you are experiencing bullying, please talk to a family member, friend or professional. Contact numbers can be found in the external links" and maybe you can just add a few contact numbers if people are experiencing bullying? Just a thought :) Thanks! --U3062955 (discuss • contribs) 00:09, 19 October 2016 (UTC)

Hi, I thought you might like some help with information - I've found a study that looked at the psychological needs of bullies, rather than the social needs, but perhaps you could talk about how the social needs flow from a psychological need? Apparently, needs to acquire help or security from others, and aggression positively predicted cyber bullying and males were more likely to perpetrate it. Here's the url: http://eric.ed.gov/?id=EJ858926 Good luck --U3083662 (discuss • contribs) 08:38, 28 September 2016 (UTC)

Hi again, I have found an interesting research article that hopefully you haven't found already. It relates to the social dynamics that occur around bullying in schools, and has some interesting perspectives on bullying that should hopefully help. Good luck again :) Here's the url for the full-text PDF: http://www.confero.ep.liu.se/issues/2015/v3/i2/150624/confero15v3i20624.pdf

Hi, Interesting topic for your chapter! I was thinking maybe it might be interesting to add a section about how to "de-motivate" (prevent) bullying. I found an interesting article that looks at the moral motivation involved in defending victims against bullying, it also takes a social approach by considering how social status, peer influence, and teacher support influence defending behaviour. The article is called, "Moral motivation in defending classmates victimized by bullying" by Lenka Kollerová, Pavlína Janošová & Pavel ŘíČan. Hope this is helpful, All the best! --U3117275 (discuss • contribs) 10:47, 15 October 2016 (UTC)

Hi. I found an interesting article about the impacts of bullying on student relationships. If this article is not something you are really looking for, it does have some interesting references about health related consequences of bullying for the victim and the bully. The Impact of Bullying and Victimization on Students' Relationships by Jannick Demanet & Mieke Van Houtte I hope this helps. --U3119480 (discuss • contribs) 15:39, 18 October 2016 (UTC)

Hi! Just read through your chapter and its looking really good! The only things I wanted to add were that I wasn't too sure about the bold for some of the figures/words in one of the sections (this may just be a personal thing). Also, there was a sentence in the section on what motivates bullying behaviour, where the wording was a bit confusing. "Effectively, McClelland considered the link between motivation and action, at a time the study of the two in psychology had been separated." Was gonna change, but I thought i'd run it through you first :) --Jazznicol (discuss • contribs) 00:45, 19 October 2016 (UTC)

Direct edits and clear writing
Hi, I've just read through your chapter and it looks good. Hopefully this helps! I really like your introduction and how it links back to Needs Theory.
 * Hopefully you don't mind!! I made quite a few changes to the overview section to join your ideas together. I had to Google to check what it's called, but you had quite a few conjunctive adverbs (indeed, however, for example etc) for separate but related points. This pattern is throughout your article so it's worth clearing these up - not a big thing but 30% hangs in the balance :)
 * I also noticed there are quite a few short paragraphs which could be joined together or re-structured so they're longer and flow better..
 * Your topic is what motivates bullying but you've just focused on Needs Theory. It's worth clarifying why you chose that particular social theory over others. I had a bit of a look around to see what other theoretical perspectives exist and there's a good article by Ken Rigby on Theoretical Perspectives and Their Implications (doi 10.1177/0143034304046902). One perspective they take is bullying occurs in response to peer-pressure--social needs of a group, rather than social needs of an individual.
 * I think you might be short on words, but it might be good to point out practical applications -- so what? Perhaps kids can be provided power through different avenues? Or where it's socially accepted like in a game.
 * A friend of mine was reading over my shoulder and freaked out a little reading the opening vignette, so it might be worth adding a small note / warning or disclaimer.

TristanMM (discuss • contribs) 09:21, 19 October 2016 (UTC)

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Hi Brooke,

If you're looking at cutting down on words, maybe your introductory example could be cut down a little. At the moment, while it certainly has emotional impact upon the reader, it is a little lengthy to get through. Instead you could maybe just talk from the bullied girl's perspective, and you could still produce the same emotional impact. Also, remember to italicise your "figure" sections before you submit to adhere to APA formatting. I would also suggest moving your motivational needs table to below the power needs section, as it acts as a summary and doesn't fit so well at the top. :) --Qt3141 (discuss • contribs) 12:51, 19 October 2016 (UTC)

Hi Brooke! Great chapter, it looks very well thought out! A few things, if you're looking to reduce your word count the sections Achievement needs, Affiliation needs & Power needs are really big, dense sections. You could perhaps try to cut some of this down to fit into the word count. And with these sections, maybe try adding some more boxes? It's just very dense and a lot to take in, in these sections! so breaking it up a bit might help the reader comprehend it all :)--U3100166 (discuss • contribs) 23:58, 19 October 2016 (UTC)

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Note that the subtitle doesn't match the book table of contents subtitle - all subtitles are in the form of a question - that way there can be an 'answer'. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:20, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

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