Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Sexual assault non-reporting motivation

Comments
Hi, looks as if your page is coming along well! I don't know if you are going to talk about treatment options for victims, if you are I have included a couple of articles on EMDR which I found to be a good starting point. Best of luck with your chapter. https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC3951033/      http://journal.frontiersin.org/article/10.3389/fnhum.2014.01035/full--U3090066 (discuss • contribs) 19:13, 10 October 2016 (UTC)

PTSD section
Hey there,

I was looking through your chapter and noticed you have a lot of subtitles especially in the PTSD section. To make it neater, you could used a table, which could free up space and make it easier for the reader.

Otherwise looks great. --Muzz2016 (discuss • contribs) 08:44, 13 October 2016 (UTC)

Layout
Hi, your book chapter is looking great! you have a lot of information which is excellent but maybe try breaking the big blocks of text up with some images or coloured templates. This makes it easier to read and also more engaging as a presentation. Good luck!U3115468 (discuss • contribs) 22:45, 14 October 2016 (UTC)

Great Chapter
Hi :) I have really enjoyed reading your chapter, such an interesting but important topic!! I hope you don't mind but I have fixed a few small grammatical errors in your chapter, mostly adding hyphens for the word 'well-being' :) It is coming along great, keep up the good work.

--U3121176 (discuss • contribs) 02:03, 16 October 2016 (UTC) Nikki

Hi there,

Fantastic chapter! I recently watched a programme on Sunday night about sexual assault on university campus's and was really curious about why victims don't speak up. Your chapter really cleared it all up for me! I fixed up a spelling error and inserted missing commas. I couldn't find much to critique apart from a couple of sentences that might need some modifying

I found this one here under informal support networks a bit hard to follow -->The most common reactions that prevent disclosure to additional sources of assistance or in order to begin legal proceedings are blaming victims for the assault occurring or doubting the victim’s disclosure.

I think this sentence here under Learned helplessness might also need to be restructured -->The observations and similar research conducted into the behaviour of individuals in repeatedly exposed to traumatic situations has demonstrated that learned helplessness has de-motivational consequences on human behaviour.

Hope this helps! Good luck! --U3119842 (discuss • contribs) 09:14, 16 October 2016 (UTC)

PTSD Section
Hi Kate,

Great book chapter! As another person suggested, maybe using a table for the PTSD section could help to improve its readability. I also thought that it could be expanded a little more to detail how PTSD actually effects people's motivation to report sexual assualt, as so far you've mainly discussed the symptoms. The following journal articles may help with this :
 * Reporting decisions after sexual assault: The impact of mental health variables.
 * Social Reactions to Sexual Assault Disclosure and Problem Drinking - Mediating Effects of Perceived Control and PTSD
 * Social Reactions to Sexual Assault Disclosure, Coping, Perceived Control, And PTSD Symptoms in Sexual Assault Victims.

Thanks, Jenna --Qt3141 (discuss • contribs) 10:42, 16 October 2016 (UTC)

General feedback
I really like your chapter! it's very interesting and well written. The theories you've chosen to focus on are very well explained and linked to the topic well. I noticed that you sometimes use direct quotes in you chapter, when using direct quotes you should also reference the page number they came from (if they've come from an article). Other than that, you've done a great job! well done :) --U3117275 (discuss • contribs) 10:26, 17 October 2016 (UTC)

Feedback
You have done an amazing job and the chapter flows really well. The pictures you have used make, were a good choice. I would add citations in the Overview section, just as it seems that this information may be from another source.

--JazNF (discuss • contribs) 21:59, 17 October 2016 (UTC)

Adding a quiz
Hi, your chapter looks like it's coming along really well and i'm assuming your close to your word count, however I think adding a quiz to break up some of the text and make it a little more interactive could be beneficial. Good luck with your chapter!--Jbboys (discuss • contribs) 07:12, 18 October 2016 (UTC)

Bullet-points
Add bullet-points to the See also and External links sections. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:09, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Wiki links
This chapter could be improved by linking the first mention of key words to corresponding Wikipedia articles e.g., anxiety. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:45, 23 October 2016 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:17, 16 November 2016 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:32, 25 November 2016 (UTC)