Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Water and emotion

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Hey - I found a great read on the topic of blue space, before seeing your page I was not familiar with the term, I look forward to seeing your final result! Here is a link to the article, but if it doesn't work the title is: 'Blue space: [null The importance of water for preference, affect, and restorativeness ratings of natural and built scenes.]'

link: http://web.a.ebscohost.com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/ehost/detail/detail?vid=3&sid=f2953814-e7d9-4a5c-81a1-ad3c64e32e24%40sessionmgr4007&hid=4112&bdata=#AN=2010-23360-009&db=psyh

there are quite a few more sources on PsychINFO database. Good Luck! --Sebastian Kelly (discuss • contribs) 02:18, 20 October 2016 (UTC)

Hi there, tried to put a hanging indent in your reference list for you, but my laptop wasn't cooperating (thus the multiple edits and undoings, sorry haha). Nonetheless, have left the template for you in the hopes that you may have more luck. All the bestU3117451 (discuss • contribs) 08:22, 20 October 2016 (UTC)

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Hi! First off, very interesting topic! I haven't started reading yet but I've noticed your overview section is significantly longer than most people's are, so I suggest separating it into subheadings. "Water pleasures and arouses individuals" sounds inappropriate, so I would consider changing the phrasing. I would suggest changing the sentence "There is rising confirmation to advise that contact with the natural environment can be linked with mental health benefits" to "There is rising confirmation that advises that contact...", as I had to read the sentence a few times to understand what you meant. I also added a comma after depression and before mental health in the overview section. I think you need to read through your article and have a look at your sentences, as some as very long and a little unclear. Also, you should not use 'etc.' within the text. It looks unprofessional.

Maybe you could put your definition of blue space into a coloured box? It would help break up the text and look interesting! Instructions on how to do that here.

I would also put your different theories under separate headings within your theories section. Again, I think it would help to break up the text a little. In the same vein, you could add some images! Maybe of dams, lakes, or other bodies of water? Even people at the beach would be a nice touch.

Don't forget to fix up your references!

Good chapter content! Your in-text referencing is good too!

Cora --Cora.boyle (discuss • contribs) 08:58, 20 October 2016 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:40, 24 October 2016 (UTC)

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