Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Exercise and negative emotions

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Hi, you have great content so far for your topic and plenty of references to draw upon! Here are some tips: --U3186377 (discuss • contribs) 21:19, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Heading changed to biological effects of physical exercise - more succinct, easier to digest for readers
 * In text citations - if 3 or more authors write first surname then et al., year. This will not use up your word count so quickly and makes sentences less lengthy. I changed this in 5 instances.
 * Fixed up double spacing within text 4 times
 * changed eg to e.g.
 * good use of short quizzes to test memory
 * Add to conclusion and link back to theories of motivation, show why this research is important.
 * I added a link to your first external site, however the second page does not exist. Perhaps go back and check this then link
 * mispelling of participation
 * Italise Figure, in caption under pictures as per APA requirements.

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Exercise can be incorporated into everyday life by just minor changes. For example walking to the nearby shops instead of driving there, taking the stairs instead of the lift, minor stretching, walking for a few minutes during the break or just having a stroll around your garden in the evening. Wishmi 3/09/17

Feedback
Hi Morgan, great page thus far, I can see you have considered a breadth of research and theory and you have broken up your chapter into subsections really well. I have a few tips relative to subjects you can employ in your chapter: Hope these points can help in your chapter! Good Luck --U3144362 (discuss • contribs) 08:51, 18 October 2017 (UTC)u3144362 7:50PM
 * 1) Maybe under cognitive effects you could consider cognitive dissonance theory?
 * 2) For a more comprehensive review you could examine different types of physical exercise e.g. strength and aerobic exercise
 * 3) Maybe you could address the intensity and duration variables of exercise and if they have a significant impact in mediating negative emotions
 * 4) One area of exercise which has received exponential growth is the use of biofeedback tools like fitbits, maybe this could be incorporated into the section of what techniques individuals can use? I also noticed that James has suggested to incorporate a case study, maybe you can use this topic to develop one?

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:12, 16 October 2017 (UTC)

Chapter feedback
Hi I saw your moodle post looking for some feedback. This looks like a really interesting topic and you have set it out well. As our pages are intended for a non psych audience and how they can use this stuff in real life I would imagine there would be a lot of interest in benefits of exercise versus SSRI's for people who are not keen on medication. I found the part you are up to a bit tricky in that I wasnt really sure where to start! If it was me I would begin with the definitions (make sure you keep it fairly brief and link to other pages). The first bit is the toughest to begin then it gets easier. I tried to imagine I was writing it for an actual person who was interested in my topic. It helped me tell the story. Good luck! let me know if you want me to look again before its due. --U3135539 (discuss • contribs) 10:47, 18 October 2017 (UTC)

Feedback
Hi Morgan,

I can see that your chapter is coming together very well. Your chapter is interesting and I can see that you are referencing a lot of good sources. The plans you have added in from 4.0 to 4.4 are comprehensive to answering your topic question. I think you are headed in the right direction, everything you have so far is also very well written and easy to follow.

Kind regards --EmmaCane28 (discuss • contribs) 07:59, 19 October 2017 (UTC)

Hi There. You're topic looks like its coming along well! The only thing I would suggest is the use of a few more images. Perhaps in the "What are negative emotions?" section. I think this will really help people engage with the topic. I also noticed you haven't linked any previous book chapter to your "see also" section. I went ahead and had a search for some chapters you might find useful. I suggest having a look at Hope this helps! --U3133258 (discuss • contribs) 07:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Exercise and mood (Book chapter 2014)
 * Exercise motivations (book chapter 2014)
 * Exercise motivation and personality (Book chapter 2016)

Adding shorter sub-headings maybe
Hi,

I read through your chapter and it looks really good. Everything is well researched as well. I would just recommend adding shorter subtitles or headings and then providing a small overview and then branching that into the bigger headings in your chapter. It just makes the layout and the table of contents look more neat and tidy. I was going to direct edit for you but wasn't sure if this was something you'd want to do?

I hope this helps! All the best

Quick Suggestions
Hi Morgan! I was just reading through your chapter and WOW! You have really out-done yourself when it comes to information and analysis! Very very informative :) I would only make a few suggestions regarding the overall look of your chapter and it usability. The integration of some images would really improve and break up your chapter (I always go straight for the pictures when I am doing any readings haha!) and also some case studies! Your chapter is so specific in the topic that you have chosen so some mock up case studies would really help with overall understanding and again, it would break up the chapter visually.

Hope this helps :) Psychostudent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:53, 27 November 2017 (UTC)