Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Loneliness

Comments
Hi - your chapter outline is looking great! It is really clear and easy to follow. Dividing into age groups is a great idea, it highlights how the causes and outcomes of loneliness differ with age. Is there much research on whether the ways to manage it also differ across age groups? Could be interesting to divide that section into age groups too if there is? This journal article might be useful – it compares the effectiveness of behavioural interventions and the potential benefits of using adjunctive pharmacological treatments: Loneliness: Clinical import and interventions (2015) This one links in with our current BAS/BIS readings - how reward/punishment sensitivity is linked to loneliness: Multiple mediators of reward and punishment sensitivity on loneliness Such an important topic – thanks for choosing it! --u3122707 (discuss • contribs) 05:47, 22 August 2017 (UTC)

Hi! Your chapter is looking really good, definitely a solid foundation! I listened to a podcast recently about conceptualising physical contact as a biological need, that talked about how lack of touch can stunt development. It was really interesting. They also spoke about observational research that recorded the frequency of platonic physical contact (eg. a hug, holding hands) across cultures and different countries, and found that the countries in which people engaged in the least physical contact day-to-day had the highest rates of violent crime, and also played more contact sports such as rugby. I haven't been able to find the original study they were referring to, but here's an overview of a similar thing, with some links to academic articles - https://www.psychologytoday.com/blog/lifetime-connections/201501/skin-hunger-why-you-need-feed-your-hunger-contact Either way, I think comparing loneliness, and attitudes towards relationships from a cross-cultural perspective could also be interesting! ^forgot to sign off! RaniaLillian (discuss • contribs) 01:29, 25 August 2017 (UTC)

Hi, I really enjoyed reading your chapter. It was informative, cohesive and easy to read. I only have a few suggestions for you. I like how you were able to shows the relationship between loneliness and crime in our local area. Good work with the arousal and decreased motivational sections. I found them to be brilliant and especially eloquently worded. I myself am terrible with grammar, I tend to write extremely long sentences that I then need to cut down. Therefore, I can't give you a suggestion on how to fix this, but the sentence "Similarly, a negative outlook, reduced happiness and satisfaction from activities and relationships and increased pessimism have been consistent findings" doesn't look right to me. Overall I think you have a very well put together chapter and you have done a great job so far. Kind regards --EmmaCane28 (discuss • contribs) 08:04, 18 October 2017 (UTC)
 * You might want to consider adding a hyperlink to the word "ennui", a lot of people would not know what this means and would have to look it up. Linking to wiktionary or wikipedia would make it a simpler process for them.
 * I think it may be useful to look at family estrangement and feelings of loneliness. Certain times of the year such as christmas and birthdays can lead to increased feelings of loneliness in people who are experiencing family estrangement. I guess this would fall under the category of bereavement
 * The risk of suicide in chronically lonely people may be useful to mention in your chapter. I'm not sure if this suggestion is helpful or would make writing your chapter more complicated but maybe you could just include this in a text box as a fact

Hi, you're chapter is great ! I think you have used an excellent structure to define and explore the concept of the question and then directly answer both parts of the book chapter question "What is loneliness, what does it matter, and how can it be managed?". You've done such a good job that its really hard to provide any useful feedback. The one thing I can recommend is maybe expanding the conclusion to provide recommendations for the general public, using the solutions you identified in the 'Management and Treatment' section, into key take home points. This is to go along with the book theme of "how an aspect of psychological theory and research knowledge can be used to help people live more effective motivational and emotional lives" (taken from assignment overview page). Other than that great job keep it up ! Kind regards, Morgan --MorganSlater (discuss • contribs) 01:39, 19 October 2017 (UTC)

Presentation
Hey! Your page is looking great. Really easy to follow and an interesting topic. One suggestion for your presentation- maybe try adding a few images or graphs/diagrams at the bottom section of your page. This will help to break things up even more-so. Goodluck! --U3117399 (discuss • contribs) 02:36, 1 October 2017 (UTC)

Feedback
Hey there - your page looks great thus far! lots of different elements but it ties together well. Following on from the aforementioned comment I think maybe the management and treatment section could be put in coloured box with different boxes for solution 1, 2 and 3. I think this could add an interactive visual element to your chapter and engage the reader and it also separates your chapter into succinct memorable chunks. Great chapter and Good Luck with final editing Jane --U3144362 (discuss • contribs) 09:12, 18 October 2017 (UTC)u3144362 8:12 PM

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:39, 15 October 2017 (UTC)

General Feedback and Suggestions
Overall a great chapter so far. It’s cohesive, easy to read and flows well across sections. There is a substantial amount of information from high quality references.

There needs to be an improvement in format within the Case Study box under sub section Types of Loneliness. Also add a colon at the end of the word provided and expand on the quotations – provide more description about the context of the quotations.

The boxes of Self-Quiz and Motivational Theory should be different. In making them different, those viewing the page will quickly be able to differentiate between an interactive feature and a non-interactive feature. I suggest even getting rid of the Motivational Theory box and just including the theory within the normal format.

There should be more visual aids in the book chapter. You could include images within the sections describing loneliness across the age groups.

You should also include some interesting facts, as well as important statistics to bring across significance of the issue and to draw interest to the topic. Statistical data about loneliness can be found on the Australian Bureau of Statistics website.

You could also include government intervention on the issue, and talk about different ways that the government is approaching the issue to help lower it’s negative effects on the population. Refer to Australian Bureau of Statistics link.

Ivona Kraljevic (discuss • contribs) 12:31, 18 October 2017 (UTC)Ivona Kraljevic

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:09, 27 November 2017 (UTC)