Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Childhood neglect and emotion

Heading style
Remove bold from headings - use default heading style. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:08, 27 August 2018 (UTC)


 * Thank you, James this was something I hadn't noticed. TaylorMal (discuss • contribs)

Hey Taylor, just wanted to let you know you've still got bolded headings for Relationships (Social, Romantic, Dependency vs independency). Didn't want to remove it just in case you left it to remind you of something so hoping you see this... Dot--Foley.d (discuss • contribs) 11:09, 20 October 2018 (UTC)

Thank you for the pick up on this, all my subheadings seem to be bolded and I am unable to change it. I have posted on the discussion forum in hope to get help. TaylorMal (discuss • contribs) 06:41, 21 October 2018 (UTC)

Social Contribution
Hi taylor. i have not been able to stop looking at this book it is really well written and interesting. i really like your case study of the boy who was raised by a dog. are you able to insert a picture here? i understand how tricky to it is to add pictures due to the copy right issue! i feel it will make the case study really powerful. Congrats on such an interesting chapter. Joog 17 (discuss • contribs) 9:43, 21 October 2018 (UTC)

I think this is a wonderful suggestions and I would love to do this, but I am right on word count and I need to have a caption to put in a picture. Thank you so much though TaylorMal (discuss • contribs) 06:43, 21 October 2018 (UTC)

Social Contribution
This is a very well thought out book chapter, it is well organised and very interesting and informative.It is clear that you are on the right track and will produce a high quality book chapter. I noticed you were planning to add a link about mandatory reporting in Australia. I found a link that might be helpful for you to add. NSW Family and Community Services has an informative webpage that outlines the signs of childhood neglect and abuse and how it can be reported https://www.facs.nsw.gov.au/families/Protecting-kids/reporting-child-at-risk/harm-and-neglect. --Bridie Mcinerney (discuss • contribs) 05:27, 1 October 2018 (UTC)

This is a very intriguing topic you have chosen, and I admire that you have a particular interest towards this field in Psychology. It is apparent from the many headings and sub headings that this will be a very informative book chapter, so I'm sure whoever reads this will learn a lot about the topic. I like your idea of including experiments under the Theory heading, so a suggestion could be providing a link to a video on Youtube demonstrating these experiments, for example: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=apzXGEbZht0. Just so the reader has a visual of this and thus helps in understanding the content (as I know this topic is quite dense). Well done! --Abbsu3163507 (discuss • contribs) 07:36, 29 August 2018 (UTC)Abbsu3163507


 * Thank you so much for your advice. I have now added an external link for the video. TaylorMal (discuss • contribs)

This is a particularly interesting topic you've chosen and I'm sure you've found plenty of research on it already. I noticed you've got a subheading for Childhood PTSD which I think is a really important aspect of this topic. I found a couple of articles which I think might be quite helpful for this: https://www.researchgate.net/publication/11821720_Childhood_trauma_and_risk_for_PTSD_Relationship_to_intergenerational_effects_of_trauma_parental_PTSD_and_cortisol_excretion https://childtrauma.org/wp-content/uploads/2013/11/PTSD_Caregivers.pdf Hope you find these helpful! Good luck with your chapter! --U3142860 (discuss • contribs) 07:54, 29 August 2018 (UTC)


 * I can't thank you enough, these are very helpful articles. TaylorMal (discuss • contribs)

good topic choice! Would be beneficial to put more information under each topic/ subheading to ensure you've found substantial evidence to support what you want to elaborate on. You've also left "insert title here" on your title section so just remember to remove that. Good luck! --U3158773 (discuss • contribs) 01:50, 31 August 2018 (UTC)


 * Oh, great catch. I'll be sure to remove that. I hope I have now elaborated enough. TaylorMal (discuss • contribs)

Hey Taylor, looks good. A few suggestions (although you may be getting to these points later anyway) - Reading through the overview, I was wanting to be able to click on some links for the 'problems caused by neglect' - i.e. potential links for irregular neurodevelopment, childhood PTSD, etc, to go into more depth on them as standalone topics. - I thought it'd be interesting and a good visual illustration to have brain scans showing differences in activation between children who have experienced neglect and those who haven't for the section on Neurological Basis in Abuse. - Also I thought some short examples could help clarify the comment in your Attachment Styles section about excessively dependent or independent strategies of coping.

Thank you for the comment I have taken this underadvisement ---TaylorMal (discuss • contribs)

Hope there's something helpful in there. I was also really interested in the section on ADHD and neglect - if I'm reading it correctly, it's indicating ADHD can develop from neglect? If so I'm interested to read more about this when you've got a bit further. Cheers, Dot--Foley.d (discuss • contribs) 01:03, 2 October 2018 (UTC)

Thank you for these suggestions, Dot. The page has undergone a lot of changes since this feedback but all your comments were taken into account. TaylorMal (discuss • contribs) 06:33, 14 October 2018 (UTC)

Hi Taylor. First of all, well done. I look forward to reading your finished chapter. The comments above addressed what I was going to touch on, so I will just include one minor suggestion. You have a heading labelled 'consequences' but it only has one sentence in it. I think cleaning up that section by perhaps making your other headings 'emotional regulation' and 'relationships' as sub-headings under the heading 'consequences' would be beneficial. Again, great job. --BB7897 (discuss • contribs) 22:44, 15 October 2018 (UTC)

Thank you so much, I'm going to try and add some more content into this areas. TaylorMal (discuss • contribs) 23:23, 18 October 2018 (UTC)

Hi Taylor, book chapter looks great, I went through the whole book chapter including references and correct errors, including grammatical and spelling. The reference below seems to have a word missing after Report of I thought you might want to fix that. Great job. Petersen, A. C., Joseph, J., & Feit, M. (2013). New directions in child abuse and neglect research. Report of. Retrieved from Institute of Medicine of the National Academies: https://doi.org/10.17226/18331--GabiK (discuss • contribs) 21:26, 17 October 2018 (UTC)

Thank you so so much, this is so helfpul. I'm having a lot of problem with that reference, I'll make sure I fix it up. TaylorMal (discuss • contribs) 22:55, 17 October 2018 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:18, 28 September 2018 (UTC)

Types of neglect
The types of neglect table is well prepared and presented, but is probably not intrinsic to the chapter topic and it unnecessarily dominates the Overview. It could perhaps be moved to Child neglect, with a briefer summary in the current chapter and a link to that Wikipedia section for more detail. The chapter topic, "What are the emotional consequences of childhood neglect?" doesn't ask specifically about what types of neglect there are, or whether there are different types of emotion consequences for different types of neglect etc. So, whilst types of neglect are worth brief mention, I suggest focusing on what is common in terms of the emotional consequences for childhood neglect in general. Where there is evidence of different emotional consequences arising from different types of neglect, or where there is a lack of literature about emotional consequences of specific types of neglect, then this is worth pointing out. Hope this helps. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:13, 5 October 2018 (UTC)

Darwin (1872)
Did you consult the 1872 edition by Darwin? If not, use a more appropriate citation for what you actually did consult. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:06, 13 October 2018 (UTC)

Citations involving two authors
APA style - citations involving two authors should not include a comma before the "and" - e.g,. "(Skinner, & Zimmer-Gembeck, 2016)" should be "(Skinner & Zimmer-Gembeck, 2016)". -- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:07, 13 October 2018 (UTC)

Theory
Paraphrasing an email question from : The 'Emotion Consequences' was designed to fulfil the theory criteria of the marking rubric, however, it does not specifically mention emotion/motivation theories or model. The chapter goes on to discuss Maternal Deprivation and Attachment theory, but do these count as key emotional theories or models? My main question is does it still fulfil the criteria to a high standard?


 * I agree that there's not much in the way of explicit theory in the "Emotion consequences" section. However, the whole chapter will be taken into consideration in terms of the extent to which is covers the best/most relevant psychological theory which applies to addressing the topic (i.e., the sub-title). The other sections mentioned above do contribute theory. Different theories are useful; synthesis is even better. Perhaps also consider that the question is fundamentally more of a question about research i.e., "What are the emotional consequences of childhood neglect?" which also invites theoretical explanation about why/how there may be such consequences. Overall, from a quick skim on the current draft, it appears that the chapter may be stronger in its use of theory than in providing a summary/synthesis of research - what is the best research literature on this topic and how has it been used? e.g., perhaps consider searching for and using top research syntheses such as https://journals.plos.org/plosmedicine/article?id=10.1371/journal.pmed.1001349. There is also a strong recent literature about "Adverse Childhood Experiences" (ACEs) that doesn't seem to be mentioned or used. Sincerely, James. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:24, 13 October 2018 (UTC)

Heading structure
Avoid having sections with one section - either have zero sub-sections or two or more sub-sections. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:37, 13 October 2018 (UTC)

Conclusion
The conclusion is currently general/vague; consider replacing with a more explicit summary of the take-home answer to the sub-title question, based on the best available psychological theory and research. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:42, 13 October 2018 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:50, 18 November 2018 (UTC)