Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Emotional abuse in romantic relationships

Suggestions
Hey there, really interesting topic and looks like you have done some awesome research! I may just siggest changing some of the headings to somethings a little more formal. Rather then just "Why" or "Some Stats" as the headings, maybe changing it to something like "Causes and Variables to Emotional Abuse" and "Statistics on Prevelance of Emotional Abuse". I just think this may come across a little more professional, but apart from that great work! --Sydtomcat (discuss • contribs) 11:55, 18 October 2020 (UTC)

Comments
Hey, Definitely an interesting topic and an area that doesn't receive as much focus as it should. I have attached a couple of articles that I found interesting, hopefully they are helpful to you. All the best with the chapter :) https://www.researchgate.net/profile/Christine_Wekerle/publication/8399411_Predicting_Abuse_in_Adolescent_Dating_Relationships_Over_1_Year_The_Role_of_Child_Maltreatment_and_Trauma/links/554183ba0cf2718618dcb5c6.pdf http://jiv.sagepub.com/content/early/2009/05/13/0886260509334392.full.pdf--U3090066 (discuss • contribs) 20:21, 11 October 2016 (UTC)

Hello! You've done good work on this! I made some minor-ish word changes to some of your sentences to make it easier to read in some places, if you don't like my suggestions, you can revert to a previous version in the view history tab on the top right I think. Anyway. I also have a few suggestions for you. Good work! Hope these suggestions were more helpful than annoying. --SLDux (discuss • contribs) 09:14, 10 October 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) In the marking criteria is says "Select up to the top three citations per point" and I think you've got more than that in some places, e.g. in the overview.
 * 2) This is a section in the introduction that I found a bit confusing: "The idea of males being the only abusers and women being the only victims needs to be abolished, as this can make it difficult for men to seek help in prevention programs designed for women and stop women from abusing in intervention programs designed for men (Carney et al. 2007b; Hines, 2007). "
 * 3) You first mention IPV in the Why? section, but don't explain it before hand, so I don't know what you mean. What does it stand for?
 * 4) Again, these wordings I found confusing. in the Other- self-defense, drugs/alcohol, mental health subheading: "The most common reason for IPV by both men (50%) and women (54.5%) was due to feeling offended and/or hurt, women's (30.9% and men 18.8%) second reason was self-defense and men's (31.3% and women 16.4%) second reason was drugs or alcohol." Maybe consider taking out those brackets so it reads easier.
 * 5) And this bit here, the wording confused me (in the same section as previous): "Langhinrichsen-Rohling et al., (2012) did a review on why men and women use IPV, from the review they reported that the reason for IPV by men and women was due to jealousy, self-defense and retaliation, additionally mean reported control being a reason for IPV. "

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:40, 14 September 2020 (UTC)

Feedback
Hi, I just have a few quick suggestions. Perhaps takeout the first two paragraphs of the overview and put these under a introduction type topic heading. I believe the overview should just outline the focus of the chapter, so starting with “the aim of this chapter” as per the third paragraph currently.

Additionally suggest rewording 2, 3 and 4 of the focus questions to make them flow more with the content of the chapter.

I would also maybe add some additional subheadings under the table of contents to make the chapter and information more accessible and the layout clearer.

I think you’ve picked a great topic and I look forward to reading the finished chapter!U3202026 (discuss • contribs) 06:09, 5 October 2020 (UTC)

Gaslighting
I have found an interesting article about gaslighting which could be an interesting area to explore. https://search-proquest-com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/docview/2244600104?rfr_id=info%3Axri%2Fsid%3Aprimo--Jackson McNee (discuss • contribs) 00:58, 7 October 2020 (UTC)

Overview vs. Introduction
Avoid having both an overview and introduction; consider merging or renaming the Introduction. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:07, 11 October 2020 (UTC)

Examples
Try to add a title in your case study (example) session.--U3178984 (discuss • contribs) 03:31, 12 October 2020 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:38, 13 November 2020 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:35, 22 November 2020 (UTC)