Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Paedophilic motivation

Suggestions
Hi there, your chapter is looking very good and you have clearly done extensive literature review. The things I noticed that could assist you to enhance your book chapter would be Very interesting and sensitive subject to cover so great job so far.
 * include more interactive content
 * provide a some focus questions to get the reader initially engaged
 * with the image you have included perhaps the caption should explain why its included?

Hey. Your chapter is looking good! I would love to see some more quiz/reflection questions and some case studies as well. This will definitely be more interactive for the reader :)

--u3189981 (discuss • contribs) 06:04, 15 October 2020 (UTC)

Focus Questions and Overview
I think you could expand the focus questions a little bit (maybe refer more to the question heading of the page), you have a lot of body information and I think the depth could be better reflected in these questions. Also my understanding is that the overview is similar to an abstract as opposed to an introduction, maybe look at revising this. U3202026 (discuss • contribs) 00:19, 28 August 2020 (UTC)

Given the sensitivity of the subject, it might be worth briefly acknowledging the effects this motivation has on its victiims--Hill Sarah Louise (discuss • contribs) 06:56, 24 September 2020 (UTC)

Reference errors
Hi, Errors in APA style for references. Books, journals, and encyclopedias are italicized. --U3178984 (discuss • contribs) 02:46, 28 August 2020 (UTC)

Heading casing
-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:28, 19 September 2020 (UTC)

Royal commission into institutionalised abuse
Hi,

You could look into the findings from the royal commission into institutionalised abuse. Looking into how certain positions of power influence or attract people with this motivation.--U3185008 (discuss • contribs) 04:01, 13 October 2020 (UTC)

Images
Great work! Very interesting to read about these disgusting sadistic people. I would suggest being a bit more descriptive on your images and adding "figure 1" or "figure 2" etc., in italic at the beginning. I went ahead and added the figures in for you. Nevertheless, keep it up! U3166897 (discuss • contribs) 11:56, 16 October 2020 (UTC)

Great topic
Hi. This topic is really interesting, one I feel people could really appreciate. However, it reads a little bias and not for a international audience. For example, you refer to 'the paedophile' over 'a paedophile' throughout your chapter. This to me, reads negatively already and could deter the reader. I certainly learned something here. Cat

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:45, 8 November 2020 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:28, 23 November 2020 (UTC)

Discussion point
Hi there,

I am mesmerised by this topic and this encouraged me to do some of my own research ! I found some really intriguing results from a 2007 study which found structural brain abnormalities in paedophilic individuals. They then also linked these abnormalities to obsessive-compulsive disorder which I found intriguing. Nonetheless, I was not sure how credible this source was so I did some more research and found a recent study from last year (2021) that supports abnormalities in the same structural brain regions. I wonder how this information could change the future of catching sex offender?? Food for though :)

1st source fhttps://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0022395606001166?casa_token=thLTmwNi_FkAAAAA:n1I9VBo6mDs-D5bxRP0w8Rv3v-OCI-PyJdBf3SxoSGSidYk7B10Ker2G8I_LYbdeLP2rcUi_JQfG

2nd source

https://onlinelibrary.wiley.com/doi/full/10.1111/pcn.13292 U3210431 (discuss • contribs) 06:01, 12 October 2022 (UTC)