Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Employee assistance programs

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:28, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

Thoughts and suggestions
Hi there,

This chapter is shaping up to be very fascinating to read, and the work you're putting in shows. At this stage I won't have any feedback related to the material specifically, but I've spotted a few things to be aware of.

1. The reference list can only contain scientific sources, so that Safe Work Australia reference will need to come out. It looks like you only cite it in the overview, but you also have a previous sentence with a direct link to a Safe Work Australia site. Perhaps you can merge the sentences together so you can remove the reference?

2. Would it be worth considering moving the 'Case study outcome' to the conclusion section, right above your written material? That way, it can be separated away from the section 3 quiz.

3. Reading the chapter, whenever you reference a study you write the sentence in the passive tense (e.g. A recent study has found that enhancing emotional intelligence can decrease the intensity and frequency of negative emotions (Sun et al., 2021)). Writing these in active tense would strengthen these citations and improve reading (e.g. Sun and (his/her/their) colleagues (2021) found that enhancing emotional intelligence can decrease the intensity and frequency of negative emotions.)

4. Don't forget to link to Figure 1 somewhere in your text. Figures 2 and 3 have in-text markers so they're fine.

Hope these help!

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:51, 4 November 2021 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:51, 16 November 2021 (UTC)