Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Endurance sport motivation

Definitions suggestion
Hi there I have a suggestion for when you get up to adding the definitions (I saw this was something you were planning on including as a subheading). I have seen in previous chapters some people have included a table of definitions and I found this can be very helpful for ease of layout and understanding for the reader. If you have multiple definitions you plan on including this could be something to consider? --Ashley Sanders01 (discuss • contribs) 12:29, 22 August 2021 (UTC)

Heading casing
-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:39, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

Comment
Hey, I found an interesting Ted Talk "Intrinsic motivation in sport and in life" which is related to your topic and that you might want to include in your book chapter (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EvpZaz4Fjp4). All the best writing --U3196787 (discuss • contribs) 09:47, 12 October 2021 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:51, 8 November 2021 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:12, 15 November 2021 (UTC)

Chapter resubmission feedback
These changes have been reviewed. Comments:
 * 1) Overall, minor improvements have been made to this chapter. Whilst the chapter has improved, it remains well below a professional standard.
 * 2) There are minor improvements to the Overview. There are still no focus questions or examples etc.
 * 3) Some of the changes have introduced new grammatical errors (e.g., the sentence "Which poses the question 'what are the motivational factors that drive humans to push the envelope of the impossible?'" is incomplete"), style errors (e.g., Headings using incorrect heading casing, and APA style errors (e.g., First author surname et al. should be used for citations with three of more authors). Many such original submission errors also remain (e.g., overcapitalisation (e.g., Endurance -> endurance)). Thus, overall, the presentation and quality of written expression remains below professional standard.
 * 4) Tagged grammatical errors were fixed, but many untagged errors remain.
 * 5) The order of some of the content has been changed.
 * 6) There is some minor rewriting.
 * 7) A small number of citations have been added.
 * 8) A small number of embedded links to relevant Wikiversity pages have been added.
 * 9) The theoretical focus has shifted from the relationship between personality and endurance sport motivation to the relationship between ERG theory, McClelland's learned needs, and endurance sport motivation. This is the main improvement. However, only basic descriptions are provided, with minimal relevant citation, and no discussion of relevant research evidence.
 * 10) Overuse of non-academic sources remains (e.g., Trainingpeaks.com).
 * 11) The Conclusion has been lightly rewritten to reduce the number of grammatical errors and to include ERG theory and McClelland's theory.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:02, 6 December 2021 (UTC)

(Lewis.Kusk (discuss • contribs) = U3203414) - Suggestions
Hello, I have read your chapter and I think you have some good parts to it which I liked, especially your ongoing quizzes, but I wanted to make a couple suggestions in case you wanted to improve this.

My first suggestion would be to add a "focus questions" section just after the overview. This could include maybe three questions such as "What is endurance and motivation", "What theories surround motivation", "How does motivation relate to endurance sport".

Another suggestion would be to include some more "see also" links, perhaps wikipedia pages for "Endurance" and "Motivation" as a starting point since these two concepts are important to your chapter.

Lewis.Kusk (discuss • contribs) 03:58, 15 October 2022 (UTC)