Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Fairness and emotion

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Hello again. I have provided a draft version of your introduction. Your words, but proof read (spelling and grammar) and shortened slightly as I felt that while your ideas/thoughts were good, they were a little long. I would also suggest finding a reference to go with the definition in the introduction to help add weight to your statements. Please feel free to let me know if you would like me to proof read again once you are closer to finishing. It is always hard when you are immersed in it to see small errors! I also coded a quiz box for you, to help break up all the text and add a point of difference.I would reconsider the wording in the quiz though. I found it a little hard to understand. Hope this helps.--U3167879 (discuss • contribs) 04:37, 29 September 2021 (UTC)

Hello! I thought you introduction could start with something that would make it stand out, so I have provided a different way to do a quote and correct the spelling of 'Lincoln'. Hope it helps. --U3167879 (discuss • contribs) 04:03, 29 September 2021 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:23, 6 September 2021 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:09, 13 November 2021 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:46, 15 November 2021 (UTC)

Book chapter resubmission feedback
These changes were reviewed. Comments:
 * 1) The chapter is now even further over the maximum word count, so the additional content has been ignored for marking purposes, however written feedback follows.
 * 2) There remains far too much background material about fairness and about emotion as separate concepts. Instead, summarise these sections and concentrate the chapter on the relationship between these concepts.
 * 3) Where material about fairness and emotion was been added, there was a notable lack of sufficient citation to relevant psychological theory and research. Where citations were added, they weren't always added in the References (e.g., Roadevin).
 * 4) There is a lot of new content about guilt, shame, and embarrassment but it is unclear how this is related to the topic (i.e., the relationship between fairness and emotion).
 * 5) The quality of written expression for the additional content is below professional standard. For example, this sentence is not grammatically correct: "Furthermore, a theoretical perspectives explaining the manner in which fairness have relationship with emotions.". Professional assistance with writing (e.g., through UC's Study Skills and/or Studiosity) is strongly recommended.
 * 6) The additional content appears to be largely philosophical, rather than psychological and based on psychological science (i.e., psychological theory and psychological research).
 * 7) Some external links have been embedded. Instead, these should be either citations or added to the external links section. Embedded links to Wikiversity or Wikipedia articles were not added.
 * 8) Gender-biased language is used (e.g., him). Instead, use gender-neutral language.
 * 9) Use APA 7th edition style for citations (e.g., check and correct use of et al.).

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:39, 6 December 2021 (UTC)