Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Initiative

Research article
I found this article that may help guide your research. https://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/abs/pii/S0191308501230056 --U3201217 (discuss • contribs) 08:51, 29 August 2021 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:16, 6 September 2021 (UTC)

Feedback and suggestions
Hi there,

I enjoyed reading your chapter and seeing the work you've put in. Given you've got all your sections written up, I feel like suggestions on presentation may help you out in the final stretch.

1. You're probably aware of this already, but just a friendly reminder that at the time of this feedback (35 hours until submission) you're over the allotted word count. It might be simple to remove 200 words, but then you need to factor in case studies and other non-information aspects that improve the readability of your chapter. Are there sections that can be cut down, or if really needed, removed entirely?

2. You will need some learning features, whether they be case studies or scenarios, or something else. In your chapter, natural points to put learning features in appear to be at the end of your theory sections, so people have some examples to apply your theory analysis towards. I'm sure you'll have other ideas as well.

3. There are some sections that read for too long and need to be split. For example, the 'Personal Initiative' section is currently one single paragraph, and it's very long. You'd need to cut it down into small, succinct paragraphs to make it easy to read. It doesn't read like you need to modify sentences or such, but there are points that stand out where paragraph breaks can be made (e.g. where the sections starts talking about other examples of PI).

4. Images representing 'initiative' might be tricky, but depending on symbolism you might be able to find images of things that represent initiative. As an example, you could use this creative commons image: https://search.creativecommons.org/photos/6bca9f1b-b58c-4f2c-9c29-48a2be5070f7

5. There's a reminder on your main page already, but don't forget to alphabetise your reference list, external links, and 'See also' section.

Hopefully these help you out in some small way.

--U3020459 (discuss • contribs) 10:31, 16 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Hi, thanks for the feedback, I added more images and a quiz at the end, I also made some of paragraphs less clumped like you suggested. Thanks for the advice :) U3203031 (discuss • contribs) 10:34, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:58, 20 November 2021 (UTC)

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:07, 22 November 2021 (UTC)