Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Leadership and morale

Comments
Hello, this will similarly look to my chapter in 2020 Leadership and Morale: How does leadership affect morale? (https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2020/Leadership_and_morale). Interested to see it from the military perspective. If you want, you can also contact me if you want to ask any questions. U3187226 (discuss • contribs) 11:32, 17 August 2021 (UTC)

Suggestion
Hi U3186267, I've found the topic you've chosen keenly interesting since I am undertaking a similar unit for my degree called 'political leadership'. Topics such as participative leadership, leadership grid styles, and entrepreneurial leadership are fairly interesting in regards to your topic. All the best and I look forward to see what you find. --Robert.E.House (discuss • contribs) 06:21, 29 August 2021 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:44, 14 September 2021 (UTC)

Thoughts and suggestions
Hi there,

This is shaping up to be a great chapter to read. I don't have any feedback on the material, so instead here as some thoughts about writing style and flow.

1) Right now, my main thought is that there is a lot of passive language in the chapter that could be changed to active language. You currently write in the traits of bad leaders section:

"Bad leaders are defined by a number of negative personality and character traits and vices, referred to by Hogan et al. (1994) as ‘dark side’ characteristics, which dissatisfy subordinates and thwart team formation."

While there is nothing wrong with the sentence, the passive tone doesn't give the sentence 'weight'. An active sentence might read as:

"Hogan and (his/her) colleagues (1994) write that bad leaders are defined by 'dark side' characteristics, a number of negative personality and character traits and vices which dissatisfy subordinates and thwart team formation."

2) Second relates to the section on traits and behaviours of good leaders. You explain that these are categorised into task performance and interpersonal attributes, but the specifics are lost within the paragraph. Maybe consider putting them into a table so they become more distinct?

3) The "What organisational factors affect morale?" section holds a bit too much info for a single paragraph and probably should be split for ease of reading. A split could be made where the section starts reading about authoritarian workplaces. I would also think that the "What is the effect of bad leadership on morale?" section reads a bit long, but that one is mainly on me thinking the info in last sentence can be incorporated into one of the other sentences, and you could just as easily leave it as it is.

4) Just a random thought, but perhaps the following creative commons image might be of some help? Based on what you have written it might fit around the good traits and bad traits sections: https://search.creativecommons.org/photos/c93622c8-db7b-49d5-898b-69a1632b1018

Anyway, I look forward to reading the final version!

--U3020459 (discuss • contribs) 10:40, 14 October 2021 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:23, 2 November 2021 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:14, 15 November 2021 (UTC)