Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Work and passion

Thank you James for correcting me
--Mittali Vaidya (discuss • contribs) 10:41, 27 August 2021 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:46, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

Rephrasing suggestion
Hi Mittali! you're making really good progress with your chapter! definitely looking forward to reading the rest of it! I have a minor suggestion for re-wording the first sentence in your overview. It's a little hard to understand the message you're trying to convey. Maybe try something along the lines of "Work is a crucial element in our daily lives, however nearly half of our working life is monopolized by trivial things such as travel time and years spent training". Hope this helps! I look forward to reading more on work and passion! --U3187874 (discuss • contribs) 08:08, 27 August 2021 (UTC)

Corrective suggestions
Hi Mittali, I saw that you put your chapter link on the discussion page for people to review so I thought I would have a look. Overall you have done some very good work and your chapter is very interesting, but I have put a number of clarification templates into your page. I wanted to provide as much help as possible so I was a bit nit-picky, which I hope you don't mind. I have some general comments, and then I have listed areas I identified for correction and provided a bit more detail on potential rectifications. The detailed list (1-23) is in the order they occur in the chapter:

General Points:


 * You should look at adding more references to your first few paragraphs. I have been fixing up old book chapters for my social contributions, and a lot of the errors noted by the markers in them are related to not providing references for sentences.
 * There is a very deep and well-rounded level of explanation of the psychological theories
 * Good use of subheadings
 * Effective use of case studies that assist understanding the themes
 * Well-chosen figures and pictures, however, ensure you reference each figure in the text
 * I like the table that matches the researchers to their theories

Details for corrections


 * 1) …”value to people and makes up an important part of their personality”
 * 2) “…meaningful to them.”
 * 3) Used American spelling for characterise
 * 4) Possible alternative: “by a continuous goal-oriented process and is a psychological phenomenon that translates ability into performance.”
 * 5) Capital F
 * 6) I would remove the section “on individuals life” and simply say “….focuses on the relationship between work and passion and the significant role of passion in people's lives…”
 * 7) Perhaps put: “…the different models, including the dualistic model of passion….”
 * 8) Might need to explain what you mean here: (harmoniously)?
 * 9) Perhaps a more clarifying sentence to suggest what you mean by “weak”. You could elaborate on what ‘weak’ results would be, or possibly say “…to achieve these great results, or not achieving them to the desired level (or degree).”
 * 10) Significance
 * 11) May need to clarify what you mean here (“…working hours…”)
 * 12) “highlighting”
 * 13) “have”
 * 14) “Everything has been together without our…” – Might need to rewrite this to provide a clearer meaning
 * 15) ‘Fascinates’ instead of fascinating
 * 16) ‘Passionate’ instead of passion
 * 17) Should this say ‘impossible’ instead of ‘possible’?
 * 18) “Universally related”. Missing something here?
 * 19) “…essential for them freely without a certain or minor conditions.” – A little bit muddled at the end here
 * 20) “…performing an action or…”. - I would remove ‘or’
 * 21) “As per John”. - This needs to be a bit clearer
 * 22) “is the motivation that come”. - ‘Comes’ instead of come
 * 23) “inspired are simple”. – ‘simply’

(U3186267 (discuss • contribs) 00:27, 7 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Hi U3186267 ,
 * I really appreciate your effort through pointing out few errors on my book chapter. Yes, I will have a look at it and rearrange it.
 * Again thank you so much.
 * Mittali Mittali Vaidya (discuss • contribs) 03:35, 7 October 2021 (UTC)

Figures
Hi Mittali, I made some minor edits to your figure labels (italicisation). However, I noticed that you have four images but your fourth figure is labelled as 'Figure 5'. Just wanted to bring this to your attention in case you didn't realise. I didn't want to change your numbering just in case you were planning on putting in a fourth image. --U3205964 (discuss • contribs) 01:57, 10 October 2021 (UTC)

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