Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Cultural influences on shame, guilt, and pride

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:11, 21 September 2022 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:56, 5 November 2022 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:44, 12 November 2022 (UTC)

Book chapter resubmission feedback

 * 1) These changes were reviewed. Overall, there is a moderate improvement to the chapter. See these copyedits plus comments below.
 * 2) Approximately 1700 words have been added; the chapter is now well over the maximum word count, so the last ~900 words have been ignored for marking purposes (i.e., from Conclusion onwards)
 * 3) Overview
 * 4) Figure 1 was added or moved into the Overview
 * 5) Somewhat improved
 * 6) Grammatical and written expression errors
 * 7) Focus questions lacked sufficient clarity and focus; have revised
 * 8) Written expression
 * 9) People is often a better choice of word than individuals
 * 10) The title and sub-title were correct, but this edit made it incorrect; so, I've fixed it
 * 11) Colons were incorrectly added to the headings; these have been fixed
 * 12) Direct quotes are over-used, especially from non-peer-reviewed sources. Consider expressing ideas in your own words.
 * 13) Over-reliance on non-peer-reviewed academic sources
 * 14) Grammar
 * 15) Numerous grammatical errors remain or have been introduced
 * 16) Use serial commas, per APA style
 * 17) that vs. who
 * 18) Use double quotation marks (rather than single quotation marks) to introduce a new word or phrase
 * 19) Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st person perspective
 * 20) Citations
 * 21) Use APA style (e.g., (Muris, Meesters, 2014) is not APA style; neither is (Lehman,et al 2003); nor (Sabiston, C.M, Castonguay, A.L, 2014))

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:43, 27 November 2022 (UTC)