Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Testosterone and dominance

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Hi @Giovannihbartlett, your chapter is looking great so far, is well-written, and it looks like you've made solid progress. I have made a large amount of primarily minor edits throughout, and I suggest that you continue to proofread and consider your use of first-person writing.

Although I like the breadth achieved and connection to real life in the case study examples you are using with Ted, I am not sure if the formatting works for a wiki page. It comes off a little jarring to have a section dedicated to Ted, as even though it is rich in applied theory, it splits your paragraphs between theory and narrative. Personally, I prefer the interwoven case study style that is planned for Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Psychedelic treatment of anxiety. This is because using focus boxes make it clear to the reader what is fact (i.e. psych theory) and what is fiction (even if it is relevant). As a result, a reader can choose where to direct their attention more easily. It would also mean that you would not be dedicating as much of your page space to a case study. This could just be my opinion, but it might be useful to note! --U3213682 (discuss • contribs) 07:56, 27 September 2023 (UTC)

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