User:Telamon~enwikiversity

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I get where you're coming from with the aversion to working directly from the web. I'm not so keen on having it all up here either, and I'm a lot more comfortable with a word doc, hence my lack of observable work. For me it feels a lot more comfortable doing it the traditional way with very little unprompted observation or assistance from others. The clear and concise outline on your page is a good step in the right direction, though, and gives a good idea of the way your handling the topic. I wouldn't blame you if you didn't want to post the final versions until the very end, but I would suggest adding some meat to the bones, if not a full draft then to help get yourself more comfortable with the process and give you an idea of what it will look like. Dot points might be ideal for that purpose. I hope to find the time to put that into practice myself. Regards. Telamon (discuss • contribs) 13:40, 28 October 2013 (UTC) U3065856 User Talk

This is a great page so far. The outline in general is excellent and your sections on preventing and fighting Alzheimer's early on are clear and a good example of your work. I thought I'd comment in the "making it worse" section since this is the one least fleshed out. I don't know how much work you've done on it since you put up this draft, but I would put some thought into the presentation of this section, since the layout and writing of one section in context with the rest of the chapter is worth marks as well. Since this is a self help book, presenting the information on how Alzheimer's can be made worse in a purely negative context could damage the chapter overall. I hope I'm not telling you something you already know, and that this comment might be somewhat constructive. Tying this section in with the "what can be done when first signs appear" section might increase the positivity and productivity of the section, as could making similar preventative suggestions with each point about what causes and strengthens the effects of Alzheimer's. I hope this has been somewhat helpful. Telamon (discuss • contribs) 13:58, 28 October 2013 (UTC) Alzheimer's and motivation talk