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My motivation and emotion book chapter: Personality and achievement motivation

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1) Hi Miriam, There are two main ways to provide feedback to others. First when you are on their book chapter page click on discuss and second is the directly edit their chapter by going to the section you want to help them with and click edit (it will be blue). i hope that helps.

http://learnonline.canberra.edu.au/mod/forum/discuss.php?d=361202#p895885

2) Hi Candice, I really like your chapter you have already done so much! good work. I have a few extra pointers that i dont think have been mentioned yet. Firstly, for each heading you have to have at least 2 subheadings so maybe add another heading to the self regulation part. secondly, this is a personal preference thing so feel free to ignore it but the orange box in the overview is a bit bright/ does not match the other ones so maybe a different colour. Lastly, i found a page you could include as a link to that has some similar themes and you might be able to get more ideas off (as it is an emotion not motivation chapter) its called emotions in early childhood https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2013/Emotions_in_early_childhood

Good luck http://learnonline.canberra.edu.au/mod/forum/discuss.php?d=368415#p913885

3) Hi Anna, Good topic choice and a very good case study example at the start. When i was going through your chapter i thought it could use some more colour or boxes to break things up a bit more as it seemed a bit dense. Also for an external link you could add a Ted talk.

Here is a TEDx talk on tools to measure moodhttp://tedxtalks.ted.com/video/New-Tools-to-Measure-Our-Mood-a;search%3Amood

This is one on how to start loving Mondayshttp://tedxtalks.ted.com/video/How-to-start-loving-Mondays-Tat;search%3Amondays

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4) Hi Linda, Your chapter is very good (not 100% finished i presume?) but overall very good i found it difficult to fault sorry.

I did have a few minor suggestions. Firstly, maybe you could explain figure 1 in the text as it is a bit complicated that would help understanding. Lastly, im not sure if you are aware or not but the blue heart icons you have come up with an little information icon on them which takes away from the picture a bit.

Good luck http://learnonline.canberra.edu.au/mod/forum/discuss.php?d=369655#p916620

5) Hi Chloe, I had a look at your chapter its looking good.I have a few suggestions for your chapter: Firstly, For under the 2nd title "the role of motivation" you only have one sub title. I think James said we have to have at least two otherwise you could just label it "what is motivation" Secondly, the overview could be a bit longer/ provide more detail about the common findings as it is suppose to be like an intro/abstract thing. Thirdly, maybe add some more specific questions to your quiz relating to your chapter. I know you are not finished yet so if you were already planning on doing those changes just ignore what i have said haha.

Good luck. http://learnonline.canberra.edu.au/mod/forum/discuss.php?d=369564#p917270

6) Hi David, I had a good read of your chapter and it think it is coming along very well. I really like the layout of the chapter. I have a few suggestions on things to possibly improve. Firstly, up the top under the title (by monday) you need to add the box for the multimedia link. This can be done by clicking the edit source button at the very top of the page and putting in this code....(gave code). Secondly, when you refer to figure 4 under the self determination theory i think it should be in brackets maybe like this: (see figure 4.) Thirdly, the diagram for the self determination continuum is a really good idea instead of using up the word count. However i would try to make it fit across the whole section or start it on the left if you can do that. Also, you might have too many pictures but they all seem relevant so probably not haha. Lastly, i think your page would benefit from a coloured box somewhere to high light something important. For example the last table could be in colour to draw attention.

Overall, it is a good chapter. Well done.

http://learnonline.canberra.edu.au/mod/forum/discuss.php?d=370219#p918038

7) Hi, your chapter is really interesting. My suggestions are: Making all of the figures a bit bigger as they are hard to see at the moment. I did your quiz and it’s a good idea but I was unsure of what my answers meant. Maybe include a summary after the quiz explaining what it all means in terms of the fear of missing out. Lastly, I would suggest using internal linking more. For example you could link the theories like social cognitive theory so that if readers want to know more they can click the link. I really like that you put each theory in a colored box I think it helps draw attention to them and separate them.  Good luck

http://learnonline.canberra.edu.au/mod/forum/discuss.php?d=370573#p918923

8) HI, Your chapter topic was interesting to read. Very relevant haha. A few of my suggestions are: In the references you have not deleted the issue number I think it is for example your first reference is “Bandalos, D. L., Finney, S. J., & Geske, J. A. (2003). A model of statistics performance based on achievement goal theory. Journal of Educational Psychology, 95(3), pp.604-616. doi: 10.1037/0022-0663.95.3.604” and it should be Bandalos, D. L., Finney, S. J., & Geske, J. A. (2003). A model of statistics performance based on achievement goal theory. Journal of Educational Psychology, 95, pp.604-616. doi: 10.1037/0022-0663.95.3.604. Also im not sure if it is mandatory but I think the external links section goes under the references. Maybe use more internal links such as trying to find links for emotional health. Lastly, refer to figures in the body of the text. Good luck.

http://learnonline.canberra.edu.au/mod/forum/discuss.php?d=370723#p919420

Wikiversity discussion pages
1) (first person to contribute to the talk page)

Hi, I have found a few other book chapters from past years relating to your topic that you might consider putting under your 'see also'  heading. 1) Motivation and emotion/Book/2011/Exercise motivation 2)Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Exercise motivation 3)Motivation and  emotion/Book/2014/Dementia care motivation 4)Caffeine and exercise  motivation 2015 (page not created yet). --U3081508 (discuss • contribs) 05:14, 11 September 2015 (UTC) Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Exercise motivation in people living with dementia

2) I suggested some page links they could look at and to add references from the past 10 years (Cystic fibrosis treatment motivation)

3) I linked it to another chapter on a similar topic for them to look at and told them to add in a title for the page (Dance motivation)

4) (first person to contribute to the talk page)

Hi, I like your chapter. I have a few suggestions for some minor corrections. your page needs a subtitle. Also at the start of the chapter there needs to be a section called overview. For each heading you have to have at least 2 subheadings so add another subheading to the section 'how does empathy work?' Also change the work bibliography to References as in the end it has to be APA. Here is an internal link for a 2014 book chapter you could include as they did a similar-ish topic its called Empathy development--U3081508 (discuss • contribs) 21:50, 15 October 2015 (UTC) Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Empathy and emotional well-being

5) Pointed out errors. Referenced textbook. Spelling error and suggested adding a take home messages section (Empathy and emotional well being)

6) I suggested 2 external links from ted videos i found and linked them to the page (Bullying and pack behaviour motivation in adolescents)

7) I indented the reference list so it was in apa format (empathy and emotional wellbeing) direct edit.

8) Indented the reference list to make apa (Exercise motivation in people living with dementia) direct edit.

9) I added the multimedia link for them (Empathy and emotional well being) direct edit.

10) I suggested they move the see also section, add an external links section, to fix an apa error in the text, and to add another figure or diagram(Empathy and emotional well being)

11) I added a quiz for them (Empathy and emotional well being) direct edit.

12) Indented the reference list to make it apa (Psychopathy and emotion) direct edit.

13) Added a comment on heading format, fixing the quiz, adding boxes (Dance motivation)

14) Added indent to the reference list for apa (Defense mechanism motivation) direct edit.

15) Suggested subtitle page change as it did not match the table of contents, add a diagram, and use more links (Affect intensity)

16) I added the multimedia link for the page (Depression in older adults) direct edit.

17) I added the multimedia link (Exercise motivation for people living with dementia) direct edit.

18) Suggested more linking words, to move a link as it was not the first time it had been mentioned,suggested to fix a sentence, grammatical errors in table, and a reference was left out. (Exercise motivation for people living with dementia)