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1.Contribution to chapter on mood variation. u3092375 contributions 05:48, 19 October 2015 (UTC):Your chapter is very informative. It gets the reader's attention very quickly. Putting the quiz up front is an interesting twist. Your choice of pictures is entertaining and relevant. Providing empirical evidence is a real strength of your chapter compared to some others I have looked at. I thought it might have been better to say more about relevant theories earlier on. One area for possible improvement is to make more direct links between the theories and the empirical evidence. You do this to some extent in the conclusion. The 5 Tips near the end are helpful. U3092375 (discuss • contribs) https://en.wikiversity.org/w/index.php?title=Talk:Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2015/Mood_variation_over_the_week&action=edit

2. Contribution to chapter on Flow U3092375 (discuss • contribs) 04:05, 21 October 2015 (UTC)

Great topic and very well written. Did you know that ‘flow’ has been featured been the news recently. Here is an article by Mihaly Csikszentmihalyi himself on “Mental As: 'Flow' vital for happy, fulfilled life” posted on the ABC news website. http://www.abc.net.au/news/2015-10-06/mental-as-happiness-is-flow/6819406 The article also ends with a 10-point plan for ‘flow’ which you may find interesting. I like the story you use to introduce the chapter. In your section on Goals you write about instrinsic and extrinsic motivation as well as social comparison and explain them very well. If you wanted some additional references, here are some that I have come across by Deci and Ryan. There are a few minor edits you may want to consider. I didn’t want to mess with your chapter so I’ve made a couple of suggestions in this message: Dean is 35 years old and was raised near a river by loving parents who taught him to work hard, ‘fun’ was largely considered wasted time. Suggested change: Dean is 35 years old and was raised near a river by loving parents who taught him to work hard. ‘Fun’ was largely considered wasted time. For example, Dean’s work culture overwhelms some resulting in anxiety driving them out of the zone. Suggested change: For example, Dean’s work culture overwhelms some resulting in anxiety driving them out of the zone. Clear objectives can give actions direction, sequence and structure, however since Csikszentmihalyi and LeFevre’s (1989) earlier work, it’s become apparent that not all objectives are optimal depending on the person’s cognitions, traits and proximity to reaching their objectives (Ranellucci, Hall, & Goetz, 2015). Suggested change: Clear objectives can give actions direction, sequence and structure. However, since Csikszentmihalyi and LeFevre’s (1989) earlier work, it’s become apparent that not all objectives are optimal depending on the person’s cognitions, traits and proximity to reaching their objectives (Ranellucci, Hall, & Goetz, 2015). So you are more likely to experience flow by arranging a task so that all the flow preconditions are present rather than just focusing on some. Suggested change: You are therefore more likely to experience flow by arranging a task so that all the flow preconditions are present rather than just focusing on some.U3092375 (discuss • contribs) 04:05, 21 October 2015 (UTC) https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Talk:Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2015/Mastery_and_flow#Feedback
 * Ryan, R. M., & Deci, E. L. (2000). Self-determination theory and the facilitation of intrinsic motivation, social development, and well-being. American Psychologist, 55(1), 68-78. doi:10.1037/0003-066X.55.1.68
 * Ryan, R. M., & Deci, E. L. (2001). ON HAPPINESS AND HUMAN POTENTIALS: A Review of Research on Hedonic and Eudaimonic Well-Being. Annual Review Of Psychology, 52(1), 141-166
 * Deci, E. L. and Ryan, R. M. (1985). The general causality orientations scale: Self-determination in personality. Journal of Research in Personality, 19(2), 109-134. doi: 10.1016/0092-6566(85)90023-6 Retrieved from http://www.researchgate.net/profile/Richard_Ryan2/publication/222439154_The_general_causality_orientations_scale_Self-determination_in_personality/links/02bfe513dd59438952000000.pdf
 * Deci, E. L., & Ryan, R. M. (2000). The 'What' and 'Why' of Goal Pursuits: Human Needs and the Self-Determination of Behavior. Psychological Inquiry, 11(4), 227
 * Paragraph structure: Second paragraph under ‘Preconditions of flow’ is very good because of how you provide examples all the way through. It is also very long (over 500 words).  It might be easier for some people to take in the key points if you break it up a little.  The same may apply to at least one of the paragraphs under your heading ‘Goals’
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3. Contribution to chapter on Personality and achievement motivation U3092375 (discuss • contribs) 06:31, 21 October 2015 (UTC) Hi, There’s lots or really interesting material in your chapter and the reading list is very impressive. You mention three main areas of achievement (in general, in sports and in academia). Is your aim to focus mainly on academic achievement? Were you planning to do much on sports? I was wondering why sports has the same level of importance in the heading but hardly any coverage compared to academic achievement? Should sports maybe just feature as part of your general discussion? Also, the section on achievement in general is very short. You obviously have enough material to work with in relation to academic achievement. You might want to change the overall structure slightly to reflect that.


 * The other area you might want focus on is editing your work. My main suggestions are:


 * 1) Have a close look at the structure of some of your sentences just to make sure they are complete. For example, it is worth having a closer look at some sentences (like the second one in this quote from your chapter): “There are three Personality characteristics that can effect an individual’s achievement motivation. The first of which is the five-factor model of personality traits put forward by Costa and McCrae (1992).” “Neuroticism is regarding impulse control, anxiety, moodiness, and the degree of emotional stability.”
 * 2) Also, have a close look for typos. For example, a few times you refer to ‘extroversion’ instead of ‘extraversion’.U3092375 (discuss • contribs) 06:31, 21 October 2015 (UTC) https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Talk:Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2015/Personality_and_achievement_motivation

4. Contribution to chapter on Extreme emotions as motivation [with some edits to text] U3092375 (discuss • contribs) 00:07, 22 October 2015 (UTC) Hi Emilykate, Your chapter covers heaps of interesting material about extreme emotion really well. The definitions are clear and comprehensive. The illustrations are very good. Occasionally, when you introduce a big new section like the one on ‘Theories of emotion and motivation’, it might read even better if there were a couple of sentences to lead the reader into the section, before you introduce each major approach. I’ve made a few edits to typos and grammar which I hope helps. You probably need to change the spelling of ‘behavior’ to ‘behaviour’ to be consistent through the chapter. This sentence also looks incomplete: "The resources a person has to deal with change as well as react to the environment" Best of luck, Alex U3092375 (discuss • contribs) 00:07, 22 October 2015 (UTC)https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Talk:Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2015/Extreme_emotions_as_motivation

5. Contribution to chapter on Empathy and emotional well-being [with multiple edits to text] U3092375 (discuss • contribs) 01:10, 22 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi, I found your chapter really interesting and I can see there is lots more to come.
 * As you say, the flow of the chapter will be very important. You have lots of valuable insights already. The overall logic looks good.
 * I think it would be good to link the sections even more as you develop your material over the next few days. For example, after each major heading (like ‘How does Empathy work?’ and ‘The Effects of Empathy on Emotional WellBeing’), it will be really helpful to provide the reader with a brief overview of what’s coming next. I notice that under ‘The Effects of Empathy on Emotional WellBeing’ you’ve already flagged that you ‘add a general summary here’. *I’ve made some edits in the texts (for grammar, typos) and hope they are helpful.
 * Your discussion of autism and empathy was interesting. There are some images of children with autism on Wikicommons. I found this one in case you are interested (Autistic teenage girl.jpg)U3092375 (discuss • contribs) 01:10, 22 October 2015 (UTC)https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Talk:Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2015/Empathy_and_emotional_well-being

6. Response to comments by four other students. Alex U3092375 (discuss • contribs) 21:09, 25 October 2015 (UTC) Appreciated positive feedback. Acknowledged that I had made some changes thanks to their comments. https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Talk:Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2015/Luxury_good_purchase_motivation#Feedback

Communications on Moodle
1. Invitation to receive feedback on Book Chapter. and to provide feedback on other chapters - Wednesday, 21 October 2015, 1:47 PM http://learnonline.canberra.edu.au/mod/forum/discuss.php?d=369814

2. Thanked Zachary Scott Webster for providing Quiz code for book chapters - Wednesday, 21 October 2015, 1:56 PM http://learnonline.canberra.edu.au/mod/forum/discuss.php?d=369794

3. Advised Daniel Jakacic I was providing feedback on Wikiversity discussion page on his book chapter Wednesday, 21 October 2015, 3:01 PM http://learnonline.canberra.edu.au/mod/forum/discuss.php?d=369710

4. Responded to Tara Searle comments on chapter and made initial amendment in order specifically mention advertisers. Wednesday, 21 October 2015, 4:06 PM http://learnonline.canberra.edu.au/mod/forum/discuss.php?d=369814#p917063

5. Provided an update on the web home address of my book chapter website following edit by James Neill https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2015/Luxury_good_purchase_motivation Wednesday, 21 October 2015, 4:30 PM http://learnonline.canberra.edu.au/mod/forum/discuss.php?d=369814#p917077

6. Received feedback on book chapter. Acknowledged and accepted suggested changes. Wednesday, 21 October 2015, 6:07 PM and Thursday, 22 October 2015, 10:52 AM I really appreciate your feedback and encouragement. They're good suggestions for edits. http://learnonline.canberra.edu.au/mod/forum/discuss.php?d=369814