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This page has been developed very extensively. I think that relating this topic to popular TV shows, such as 13 reasons why and Skins, is a great way to get people interested in the topic. You have done a good job at explaining complex psychological topics simply for all readers. I encourage you to keep this up, as the references to popular shows may draw in such a wide variety of viewers and they may not have the psychological knowledge to keep up with some of the topics that may be discussed. Especially, as you state on the page, these shows are targeted at adolescents, perhaps an aim for your pages is for a teenager to be able to understand this topic completely. Overall, this topic is extremely interesting and I eagerly await the finshed topic. U3143187 (TaylorMal (discuss • contribs) = Username: TaylorMal 20:16, 28 August 2018 (UTC)

Hi there, I think it's great that you are utilising a popular television series (which delves into the issues of mental health) to explore your chapter topic. The use of a popular television series will help readers, relate to and understand your topic. Your use of psychological theories is excellent. The only recommendation I have is to add in one or two images, to enhance the visual of your chapter page. I look forward to seeing your chapter develop. --U3154928 (discuss • contribs) 11:14, 28 August 2018 (UTC)

Well done, this is an excellent book chapter topic that I'm sure will interest a broad range of audiences. The overview introduces the topic nicely, whilst enticing the reader to want to know more! The only constructive feedback I can offer is to consider fleshing out your first two headings ('what is motivation' and 'what is mental illness'). Maybe add some sub-headings to these, for example add some specific theories, or which groups of people are most affected by mental illness (youth? the elderly?) - which can then lead onto why the media influences this group of people more in terms of mental health. However, your page is looking very well structured and informative, and I can't wait to see the finished product. --Abbsu3163507 (discuss • contribs) 08:03, 29 August 2018 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:41, 12 November 2018 (UTC)