User talk:ColeVan

Hello Former Student!

I'm writing to you because you took a class from me in the past few years at the Art Institute. As of Spring, 2010, I'll not be teaching further classes at AIS for the foreseeable future. (We're parting ways on good terms!) Until now, you've been able to reach my Wikiversity educational resources from my website, but I've decided to delete that link. You can still reach all of those materials here.

If you're interested in what I'm up to in the future (which will include an album in 2010 and a novel in 2011) you can friend my facebook page or drop me an email at info@stevenarntson.info and you'll receive a periodic update about performances, classes, and publications.

If you know any current or former students of mine who might be interested in any of this, please forward this information if you have a moment.

I hope all is well for you.
 * Best! Stevenarntson

Personal Essay
I think there is a good structure here, and the essay is working in some respects. Right now it could use more numbers, especially when it comes to cost. If discussing how much a credit costs at a for profit institution versus a nonprofit, don't stick to generalities: go find out for sure. There are a number of moments here where the essay has a chance to shine, but doesn't get down to brass tacks when it's necessary.

The issue with throwing food out is in interesting one, but may not be apposite to your point, viz. the school is bound by state law, which mandates certain requirements for food preparation that aren't met by students in culinary programs--the food made for class can't even be given away for free, legally.

In revising, sift through and find out where specifics are needed, and what the strongest arguments are. Then follow up on those.

Good start! Best, Stevenarntson