User talk:Gus gardiner/The business and politics of making cheerleading an official sport

This is a great topic. I enjoyed your writing.

I am looking forward to the full paper. Title IX is a very important part of this argument.

Postillion 11:34, 13 September 2011 (UTC)

Transcript from primary research
Rosemary Sims Program Director & Events Producer - Australian All Star Cheerleading Federation(AASCF)

Questions: 1) Does AASCF think cheerleading should be classifed as an official sport in its own right, and if so why?

Cheerleading should be an official sport, and is its own sport, not an arm or leg of dance or gymnastic, as they are both only 5% of the scorecard and a style of their own.

All Star competitive cheerleading is a combination of stunting, baskets, pyramids, jumping combinations, team tumbling, and dance. It requires hours of progressive training each week. As an X athlete and X professional dancer and X world champion competitor, there are very few sports that are more intense than the training of competitive all star cheerleading. It is like the Ironman of performing arts.

The competitive score card for our sport is very intricate and the judges need to be highly experienced and knowledgeable. The coaches and choreographers have very strict rulings and guidelines to follow, otherwise as competitors they will never succeed. Extensive ongoing education for all is very necessary.

Embedding video
Hi Gus. I noticed a few edit histories back, you tried to embed a Youtube video our two. You probably realized already, that it's not possible. It's partly a copyright thing, partly a format thing. If you want to get video in your article, contact the owner of the video you want, and ask them permission to use it on the wiki. Specifically, you need to get them to write to you saying that they agree to you copying it and publishing it on Wikimedia Commons with a Creative Commons Attribution Share Alike copyright license, which essentially grants everyone else permission to reuse it so long as credit is given to the author. If they agree to that, I'll show you how to get the video on the wiki. Leighblackall 09:24, 28 September 2011 (UTC)

Merge outline into introduction, create abstract
Hi Gus, the outline (as a section heading) is redundant. I'm going around everyone and advising they merge the outline into the introduction, and when the essay is finished, prepare a 250 word abstract that summarises the completed essay. The outline was a pitch, or a proposal to the journal (and other publishers) to consider and indicate their support for you progressing your essay. You're pitch was accepted, and so the outline is no longer needed. The content therefore, merges into the introduction, and helps create an abstract. Leighblackall 21:52, 11 October 2011 (UTC)

Comments on first draft
Excellent work Gus, I'll use this as an example of good work to the others in BPS2011. I did feel that a mention of how you will cover the business and politics from a local angle was needed earlier on, as I found myself wondering about the emphasis on the USA, without clear mention of how you would go about considering the local context. The interviews perfectly cover it, so I think just mention the interviews in the abstract and introduction.

You're about ready for a peer review then. See the course website for instructions on how to do that: http://bps.ucniss.net You may as well be our test dummy for the review template :)

Thanks for your hard work, and good communication on all this Gus Leighblackall 04:51, 12 October 2011 (UTC)