User talk:JonathanStone/Football Economics: A comparative analysis of player wages and salaries between the elite football leagues

Hi Jonathan, sorry to take so long in placing a comment and suggestions here on your talk page. You should blend the outline, into the introduction now. The outline was your pitch to the journal, now they have accepted your proposed essay, you don't need an outline, the introduction can take most of what you say there. Also, try to relate the issue of player salaries, to local club policies and practices. The inclusion of the table is very interesting and good start. Reading through your outline/intro, I also felt myself asking what these massive salaries are actually spent on. Is it true that it all goes to the player only? Or is it distributed through the player's agents, coaches, therapists, charities etc? Good to watch you develop this essay. Leighblackall 21:45, 11 October 2011 (UTC)