User talk:Stevenarntson/group spaces/analytical writing/group 4


 * Hi Group 4,
 * Glad to see some things starting to appear here--I can see a pretty useful framework underlying this already; keep amplifying your research, add links to other places, etc. Actually, the movie we're going to watch in class today, The Future of Food, might be pretty useful to you.
 * Stevenarntson 14:58, 11 February 2009 (UTC)


 * Hi Group 4,
 * Great additions this week. Generally, I'd like to see some more developed introductions to the topics--right now they somewhat begin with a barrage of information, and could spend a little more time setting up the situation with a good, evocative introduction. Secondly, your "conclusion" section should be titled "solutions" instead; I'd like to see this grow into a larger piece--you're doing a good job right now with outlining the problem, and it makes me curious about how we as a culture can get out of it! Lastly, make sure you use a consistent method of citations--either [1],[2], or (author, page#).
 * Best, Stevenarntson