User talk:Stevenarntson/group spaces/english composition/group 6


 * Hi Juice Group,
 * Things are looking good here. Add some breaks between the stanzas of the renga--the Wiki does recognize or ; I added one break to the poem as an example.


 * Colin, I still like the juice poem--I'd just go through mainly to make sure that you use your/you're were/we're, etc correctly--proofreading-level fixes.
 * Stevenarntson


 * Hi Juice Group,
 * I'm looking for a little more activity here; try to produce some good content this week for your meeting with me next week, especially on the research and fiction components.
 * Stevenarntson 15:05, 5 March 2009 (UTC)


 * Hi Juice Goup,
 * Good additions this week; format-wise, break these large chunks into some smaller paragraphs,for readability. Generally speaking, I'd like to see the research paper as a single paper that synthesizes together the information you gleaned from your various sources into a single, directed, piece of thesis-based writing. The story has some great images, but I do find myself wondering about the thematic purpose of the narrative?

Best, Stevenarntson 14:15, 12 March 2009 (UTC)