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Hey! Your book chapter looks good so far. I think it would be helpful to add a specific definition of schizophrenia and motivation in your overview and also link to to another wiki page. Goodluck! Uu3148421 (discuss • contribs) 04:35, 14 October 2015 (UTC)

Hiǃ Really enjoyed reading your chapterǃ It was well-written and definitely addresses the marking criteria and really commend you on critically analysing how and why the topic is of importance. Also really appreciate how you talked about limitations as well throughout the paperǃ I have taken the liberty to make some minor changes; hope you find them agreeable. Some suggestionsː you wroteː "One study that examined schizophrenic and non-schizophrenic patients’ experiences of consummatory and anticipatory pleasure of events in their daily lives" - this is a fragment, so do consider revising You wroteː "One study gained self-report data from demographically matched schizophrenic and non-schizophrenic patients to examine problems with weight gain from the individual’s perspective. Schizophrenic patients demonstrated significantly more difficulty with maladaptive eating behaviours compared with non-schizophrenic patients. Surprisingly however, schizophrenic patients reported more enjoyment when engaging in physical activity and greater satisfaction with weight and body shape." - It would be good to provide a citation for this study Overall, brilliant chapter, solid effortǃ --U3059210 (discuss • contribs) 21:34, 22 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi Rhiannon,

Great chapter!! :-) Really informative and interesting! I have a few suggestions (you are more than welcome to take them on board or disregard then). Firstly, it could be useful to put in the DSM-5 diagnostic criteria to succinctly depict the clinical definition of Schizophrenia, just for clarification as I know a lot of people who don't exactly know what it is, for example, I know some people who confuse Schizophrenia with dissociative identity disorder (multiple personality disorder), so it could be useful to clarify this. It may also be useful to include some prevalence rates and general psychological background to schizophrenia to compliment the co-morbidity section. Secondly, you could use a few (minimal) colour headings, but this is not imperative. Also, there are a few good images on  that could compliment your chapter, but again this is not a requirement so feel free to take it or leave it :-) Lastly, before Monday (due date) you need to include the the Multimedia button link for your short summary of your chapter. You include this by just adding the below code to your chapter page just below your heading! When you have finished the summary recording you just need to insert the Link where it says "multimedia link goes here". So just edit your talk page and copy the code below to your book chapter. One last thing, your book chapter is on your user page, which I am not sure if it is supposed to be there. I think you are supposed to list your social contributions on your user page and have a separate page for your book chapter. Feel free to have a look at mine for guidance. Also, would LOVE some feedback on mine too if you have time!!! Thanks a lot! and GREAT WORK!!! Em.jacobs (discuss • contribs) 00:23, 23 October 2015 (UTC)

Suggestions
Hello! Your topic is interesting and you have made some excellent points throughout. I just have a few little suggestions for you chapter. 1). Add a few more theories. A component of the chapter is to include some theories pertaining to your topic. Thus, have a few more would help strengthen your argument throughout the chapter. The psycholoanalytic theory suggests that schizophrenia was caused when the ego did not emerge from the id. As schizophrenics do not have an ego, they distance themselves from the world and regress emotionally and mentally. The social learning theory describes schizophrenia as a consequence of inadequately responding to the social environment. Not responding to the social environment causes disturbances in the thought/emotionaly and mental process. I would also look at biological and genetic factors as causes of schizophrenia. I know it is partially heritable and there is a biological basis of it too. Perhaps looking into that further will strengthen your argument. As for your layout, it looks good but incorporating a few more pictures would make it visually appealing and capture the attention of the reader. A case study would help readers follow the scientific terms and information and could be applied throughout your chapter. Also providing treatment options and linking external treatment pages would be really excellent as this is a self help book. Ive included some useful studies below.

ref: Sprong, M., Schothorst, P., Vos, E., Hox, J., & Van Engeland, H. (2007). Theory of mind in schizophrenia meta-analysis. The British Journal of Psychiatry, 191(1), 5-13. Kallmann, F. J. (1946). The genetic theory of schizophrenia: An analysis of 691 schizophrenic twin index families. American Journal of Psychiatry, 103(3), 309-322. Harrington, L., Siegert, R., & McClure, J. (2005). Theory of mind in schizophrenia: a critical review. Cognitive neuropsychiatry, 10(4), 249-286.

I am looking forward to reading your finished chapter soon- best of luck! --U3034876 (discuss • contribs) 01:21, 24 October 2015 (UTC)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:06, 24 November 2015 (UTC)